days on my calendar
become marked off with oversized
X’s
counting down like Christmas
until a personal holiday
“Daybreak Reality”
celebrated with twisted televisions
playing home movies over
in front of families
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private humanity
vacuumed into the outside
… looking in
if only I could open the door
but storms would catch my hair
and raked relatives
with their hands clutched to the
calendar
and out with it
my timing
A contest entry
- Anything You Want: Free Verse by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended May 5, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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you know still you amaze me is so many ways, this poem is but one of the many ways, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Love it Ryan... although your creativity on this one was partially warped for me with the x factor since I am a mother with 2 daughters and x's are not good on our calendars
lol ----- other than that this was fantastic and so different. I loved the 2nd stanza --- that's just classic !! Your writing is amazing! Best of luck to you! Betsy
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This is really good Ryan... how are you so creative... it's too cute! Great job! Rock on! xoxo Meg
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Nice Job!
I really like the stanza about twisted televisions and home movies with the family. You have a way with words.
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wow i like that sooo very much
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Thank-You!
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The only thing I mark on my calendar with "x"s are my menstrual cycles. lol. The last seven lines were wonderful, though I'll admit to being thrown a bit by "daybreak reality". I get it, I think, but at the same time, putting it in quotes is, I believe, what's put me off a bit. Otherwise, your form was creative, and lended to an easy transition from one line to another. Thanks for entering
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