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If points were pennies

would I be wealthy?

 

If points were dollars

would I be healthy?

 

If points were questions

would there be answers?

 

If points were music

would there be dancers?

 

If points were air

would we have breath?

 

If points were lives

would we stop death?

 

If points were food

could we feed masses?

 

If points were water

put into glasses

 

Would no-one starve

or die of thirst

 

Would politicians

bubbles burst

 

If points could be used

to bring world peace

 

I’d give them all up

and let fighting cease

 

For what good are points

on an empty planet

 

Turning in space

just a ball of granite?

 

 

 

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  • starXcrossedxlover
    May 5, 2007

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    wow

    wow sue, this is really beautiful. I can tell you put your all into this one! Truly amazing. Great job, I liked the way you asked all those questions and I especailly like the ending, even though this isn't very happy, it's real, that's my favorite part! Great great write. best of luck in the contest and your other writing
    -HD


  • Puppydog gold member
    May 5, 2007
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    WONDERFUL!

    What a beautiful thought! What if?

  • That is just awesome; rhythm, rhyme and thought process in perfect sync.
    Well done!!!

  • WOW!


  • Whoochi gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    Oh love this, I just love thought provoking pieces like this..makes me go "Yeah, right on!" good luck!

  • Very nice. This is the first time I have read any of your work. It was a pleasure. Your rhyme was for the most part very natural and you ideas lovely. Thank you for sharing.


  • FallingTwilight
    May 4, 2007
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    Wow, this very.. interesting lol. It's cute.

    I like the rhyming.

    Good luck in the contest.

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