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Just a dark life to live alone

I live a life and...
It's just another dark life,
A dark life I'm bound to live alone.

I live a life and...
It is full of embarrassment,
Embarrassment I'm bound to go through alone.

I live a life and...
It's full of false friends,
Friends that blurt every secret.

I live a life and...
It is bound to end,
End at any moment.

I live a life and...
It's just the beginning,
The beginning of the end.

I live a life and...
Everyone thinks I'm evil because,
I'm Lady BabyFox of the Fox Demons.

I live a life and...
It's just another dark life,
A dark life I'm bound to live alone.

Author notes

Sammi:

Age 13

I'm part of the group dark stuff so you can check i'm there.

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  • Trust Calvaire
    May 27, 2007

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    hey u have friends dhere you dont have to count me out of ur life eerrr other thatn that i luv it good job


  • Jasmine Minx
    May 23, 2007

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    this is a swet poem and very good in explaining what and who you are. good luck in the future.

    Alianne Nightseer


  • Gasp
    May 15, 2007

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    good write, the flow is a bit off but it's still a good write! tyvm for being the first to enter, i hope yournotthe last lol


  • FlameFox
    May 13, 2007

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    congrats on the silver trophy big sis...and your life isn't dark and you won't live it alone...you have so many great people around you


  • Stickboy gold member
    May 12, 2007

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    first off if your friends blurt out all your secets it;s time to look for new ones that will be real friends ,,, second we are all put on this earth to someday die we only can hope and pray we do the right thing along the way! this was well deserving of your bright shinning trophy great job painting picture for me but I like happy poems from my baby sister


  • honey bear
    May 12, 2007
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    congratulations Sammi on a silver cup for this very good write


  • aliceramone
    May 10, 2007

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    a great write here with great flow and rhythm...very cool to repeat the first verse again as the last...congrats on the silver


  • zochit2me gold member
    May 10, 2007

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    I like the repeat of the first line in this. It gives it a certain edge and lingering feel. If you had not of told in notes you were 13, I would never have known, very good job and congrats on silver
    Becky


  • panegyric ink
    May 10, 2007

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    i agree, the line breaks are right on the money and the expressions are very very dark thouted!!! great job writing this 1!!!!!!!!!!

    take care
    brian.


  • Samantha-.
    May 4, 2007

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    WOW! I like this one alot man. I liked the line breaks, the sadness, the pain and it's so true. The world is full of false friends. Great poem!!!


  • RedAquarius
    May 4, 2007

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    Sammi, if you had not told me you were 13, I would not have guessed it. This is *very* well done for that age. I like the repeat lines, it strengthens the impact of the forlorn, forsaken feeling here. Minor typo - should be "embarassment" (you can edit until end of contest). Good luck and thanks for entering the contest!

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