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ALL Industrial

YOU THINK YOU KNOW AND YOUR SO SPECIAL.

SO SURE OF THEMSELVES .

YOU WILL SUFFER ONE DAY NO ONE CAN BE HAPPY FOREVER.

MY CONSCIOUS WONT LET ME HURT YOU BUT I DONT MIND COZ YOUR DOING THE JOB FOR ME .

BLOOD STILL SPILLS ON THESE MODERN STREETS,YOUR FOOLISH WORLD.

I STILL WALK THROUGH THESE MODERN STREETS ,YOUR WORLD IS DYING.

ITS HAPPINING.YOU WILL NEVER UNERSTAND SO WHATS THE POINT.

Author notes

ITS ABOUT WHAT A BAD JOB HUMANS HAVE DONE JUST TO KEEP US CIVILISED

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  • Nikkisixxx
    October 8, 2007

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    I loved the repetition of 'the modern streets' - that worked really well in the poem, which was great! I really enjoyed reading it. Well done~


  • LadyKate
    September 16, 2007

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    I really agree with this poem. Human have done a terrible job. I think the all caps helps the point of the poem. I love your poetry!


  • J McSANE
    June 11, 2007
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  • Dusty
    June 3, 2007
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    Good to hear a full showing of the damage the police and jews have done to our world.
    Thinking that they will make money and be redeemed in death. F--king fools
    El
    x x x


  • skyviewexpress
    May 24, 2007
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    Wow... At first the poem seemed like a Zombie walking around attacking or something and their emotions, which wouldnt make sense considerin zomies are mindless, but Reading the author notes it now makes sense! I loved how you explored with the vague topic and you really thought out of the box! Good job and thank you for entering!


  • Cavca
    May 21, 2007

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    You're not your. You switch subjects in the second line. Happening, not happining; won't; and because, not coz.
    It sounds like a good beginning, but I think you should expand on it. Good luck.


  • sinisterkitten
    May 21, 2007

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    this is good...although i can see that its just another poem in many contests...your hoping that you just might win something...and thats not helping you much. either way...good luck.

    oh...and also...the ALL CAPS thing isn't making your poem look any bigger. you poem is too short.


  • meoncloud9
    May 11, 2007
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    Excellent. Your thoughts are indeed very inspiring. Industrialisation causing trouble to humanity and Man himself destroying his own community is very true. Your way of expressing this is wonderful.
    Best Of Luck to you!!
    regards,


  • Entwining Beauty
    May 10, 2007

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    All the caps! heee this poem is amazing the power very well expressed with colour loved it thanks for entering


  • Fall.Of.Rome
    May 8, 2007

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    The sticky caps at the end made me literally wince. But the idea...beautiful. Good work, thank you and good luck.


  • Dusty
    May 8, 2007

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    So full of hate that it makes me smile.
    Yourshowing your hate for a world that doesnt fix you right?
    el
    x xx x


  • Logans-Mommy
    May 6, 2007
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    im not sure of a proper thing to say... im sure id have to understand first huh....

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