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catgut sutures

 

catgut sutures--

ripped raw in brittle leak

 

     drip

          and

               drop

 

plinking tunes to shuffled feet,

as cotton flakes of snow in wad

 

to stuff relief

 

gaping chasm rent by welcome thief,

as he saunters calmly in repose

               to steal--

 

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  • Desire gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    Wow!!

    What a verse You have penned!
    Love the presentation of this one and
    Powerful words there

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Nicole Hanna
    May 4, 2007

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    The imagery is very raw here, though I'll admit to being a little ignorant as to what this is most likely about. I'll draw my own conclusions, though, and continue on by saying the final lines are what really struck me the most, especially the image of sauntering calmly- that matches so well the idea of catguts in the first line.

  • Revwilliamfoos
    May 4, 2007

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    very good

    i thought that this was wounderful i felt the wildness of pain in nature the spirit of that that was and the presence of what is now sometimes inter-mingle keep doing well
    love the papa