Darkness
Surrounding me on all sides
No sense in pointless wandering
Not like I'll make any progress
Or see anything other
Than this empty darkness
The days are nights
And the sun never rises
The moon never illuminates
And the stars are blocked
By a thick black veil
I gouged out my eyes
After enduring the darkness
For so long
They seemed unimportant
So useless and inane
Only causing me to grieve
So I removed them myself
Not like it matters anyways
This darkness is impenetrable
So haunting, empty, and bleak
Once there was a light
So very long ago
But one day the sun set
And the sky turned grey
A rain began to pour
From clouds of pain
They rained a thick, cold, red
It was horrifying
Shocking, frightening
When I tried to scream
My breath stopped-caught
Immense pain flowed through
Then left-I became numb
The sickening stench of death-gone
My stomach no longer churned
And I couldn't hear a sound
When I turned
And looked down
I would have been sick on the spot
But I couldn't
Because I was dead
Before me, lay my body
Cold and drenched in blood
Eyes wide-seeing nothing
Mouth agape-screaming no more
It was mortifying
This intense gore
Then the sky began to darken
And I ran toward the light
But I was swallowed-engulfed
By the numbing, black sea
I realized-there was no hope
Not a single drop for me
Days past me by
Turned into weeks
Became months-years
And merged into eternity
The sun rose no more
No light guided me
Through this Hell I now call home
I have to wander-blindly
I shall remain
In this empty darkness
Eternally
Author notes
This just seemed to spill from my mind...
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I know that in your author notes it says that this poem spilled from your mind. Now that you have it out, I would like to urge you to go over it. Some of your repetitive lines, or even the ones that are basically paraphrased, are unnecessary and make the poem feel drug out. Your last stanza is actually my favorite..
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I'm at a loss right now and I can't really think of anything, but I'll fix it later.
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