I love it when you tell me your dreams.
'Cause then I know
What to buy you for Christmas.
And you can wake up shiny-eyed,
You never have to be disappointed.
I never want to disappoint you.
I love it when you tell me your dreams.
'Cause then I know
What to wish on stars for you.
Even if it's only silly things,
Things we know never could happen.
I want it all to happen to you.
I love it when you tell me your dreams.
'Cause then I know
What I can look forward to:
Years and years of dreaming with you,
Something to give to and take from...
Thank God,
No one can take your dreams from you.
Author notes
Dedicated to my dreamer...:-)
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this is really lovely! And thank you for the generous thoughts you've expressed towards me.
Could you edit this a little and then submit it again? Maybe as option one. Then you make it a prayer?
I really like this!!!
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this is a beautiful write! very lovely! dreams are wonderful...even more so when you can share them with someone special! take care, Sam (Dreams27) xx
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It's lovely and inspiring. Every word lends more meaning to the poem and it's just fantastic.
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ah wow this is so sweet and lovely!
A really nice read
well done!
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That is awesome.......i loved this poem.
I love it when you tell me your dreams.
'Cause then I know
What to wish on stars for you.
Even if it's only silly things,
Things we know never could happen.
I want it all to happen to you.
That was my favorite part..........the part about it being silly things you know could never happen to you reminds me of myself.....great job, keep up the good work! -
What I can look forward to:
Years and years of dreaming with you,
Something to give to and take from...
Humm very nice and very heartwarming penning here ...you have described here the emotions so beautifuly step by step and this style of yors is just rarely seen..I am really impressed from the concept of thiw rite..welldone.. -
very nice!
'I love it when you tell me your dreams.
'Cause then I know
What to wish on stars for you.'
that part I like !!
just the idea is dreamy, so very dreamy!
forever;
Scarlet -
I'd always suggest not using abbreviated words like "cause". I'll admit, though, that the shortened version of it worked here in regards to the flow of the lines, but I still think there could be a suitable substitute out there. The sentiments in this were lovely. As a mother, I can relate (though it may not necessarily be how you intended this to be taken). And it's hopeful and bright, which is a change of pace from what I read on a regular basis. Nicely done
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wow thats really nice and happy and cheerful too. woot for you
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