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Listening to the Poet in the Museum

 

 

 

I liked to think I knew something special that night:

the poet, the woman, with quiet voice

and soft self-assurance,

reading to us, of sex; love; lust and family ties.

Assonance was an adjective dancing the air that night,

in the museum. Sounds dropped with pinprick quietude

& the ache of wanting more;

left a whole crowd of unknowns; knowing what they

wanted-

to be the vowel on her tongue, that touched the glass

she drank from; praising Pennine water for its clarity.

paper reams and notes she held delicately

unbearable aches would bleed only words.

Longing to be the lectern on which she stood, to hold a foot;

a sole, the arch of her.



 

Daydreams in the auditorium, I drowned in her mouth

taking every verb and noun; bite after bite.

Swallow with small birds and slink of tasty worm.

Making: I, us and me to her, willing myself into her poetry

she stood before us in the Animal Life Gallery, on wrought

-iron steps and girders, above and below. The gentle echo

of her voice, gilded as glass eyes, staring out from stag

& swan, buck and magpie.

All the animals came; two by two by two

& for one brief second, I swear I heard the rut of deer

on the moors and sniff of sex, float on the air-

as we all pouted and preened for the Poetess that night.









 

Author notes

I heard Sharon Olds read her poetry in the Manchester Museum in the Animal Life Gallery last October 2006, it was a very special night- indeed.l

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  • onerios13
    May 12, 2007

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    I drowned in her mouth

    taking every verb and noun; bite after bite.


    Gorgeous piece, dearest...and so deserving of the gold. Congrats!


  • Kendall Campbell
    May 7, 2007

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    I've never read any of Olds' work, and while I'm sure it's good I'm just as content to have you describe the experience to me; my own might just tarnish what you painted so well.

  • atty-poet
    May 7, 2007

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    I am pea-green with envy that you've seen and heard her read, and this write captures the sensuality of such a reading nearly flawlessly. (I tripped a little on the use of colons and semi-colons, questioning some of them, though). works that animalistic theme very well. Nicely inspired. There's "erotic" and then there's "sharon olds erotic", definitely in a league of her own.


  • Emerald13
    May 7, 2007
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    for me, there are some wonderful turns of phrase here ... and yes you build the reading in my mind ... i am envious ... i love 'to be the vowel on her mouth that touched the glass' .... lovely lovely ... (wish i had thought of that one !) the whole works as well as that line, for me >>> gina


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    May 6, 2007

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    Gill, I knew you saw Sharon read and I know how much you love her work so I'm holding you to a higher standard than the others (just kidding), but writing about that night was risky and difficult to pull off, but you have written something truly wonderful, balancing the imagery and narrative most deftly. It is soft and beautiful and full of her. One of your finest pieces and a dang strong entry here, thanks....



    al


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    May 6, 2007

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    I really really really like Sharon Olds. I have 5 of her collections....I wonder who the poetess was?
    The power and beauty of words you have conveyed so well with this one Gill

    loved it!


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 6, 2007
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      i have 4... two of which are signed by her... ... hehehehhe
      thanks David


  • Robbwindow
    May 6, 2007

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    A winner for sure

    The poem seems very informative and breaming with english lexemes. Super and this auditorium place, you describe it well. Well done NurseChilly. Great to read your poetries again. Good luck.

  • zara
    May 5, 2007

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    Sharon Olds does sex sooooo well. Which isn't to say she's good in bed, but man, she's good on paper.

    It's kind of a treat to think of a poet being the object of hero-worship; I suppose it used to be that way, in centuries past, but now celebrity is mostly saved for more commercial art. I envy you that you got to see her read.

    This poem, with its clear expression of the moment, the emotion, would do her proud.

    Bravo, you.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 6, 2007
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      who knows if she's good in the sack herself... but boy does she recount it all so damned well...

      only 582 to go darlin -- hehehehheh ---


  • Heart Sutra
    May 5, 2007
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    perfect

  • grm
    May 4, 2007

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    you've painted quite the enchanted evening, Gill.
    i remember you telling me about that night. wish i had been there.
    you always amaze.

  • Rowan gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    Wow..you lucky woman, she would be honored by this write, damn this is good.
    The last 3 lines blew me away.
    I tip my pen to you hon..
    Well done.


  • The Bear
    May 4, 2007

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    This is such a complete and enveloping poem, is hard for me to describe what you have done with the images of both the poetess, the poetry and the surroundings. Well, I do not need to, do I because you did it in the poem- what I say is I cannot find the expression to say how it worked for me as reader- but it did. Oh yes indeed it did.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 5, 2007
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      a bear needs to be enveloped... for sure

      indeed it is a good day, when the bear gets his words stuck in the honey jar...


  • misselaineous
    May 4, 2007

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    i ahve been waiting for you write of that night
    and it was surely worth the wait
    this is excellent poetry my friend
    elaine


  • Night Hope gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    "Assonance was an adjective dancing the air that night,
    in the museum. Sounds dropped with pinprick quietude
    & the ache of wanting more;"

    Beautifully penned, Lady...I envy you the experience, to be sure...& greatly appreciate your stance on the use of ampersands... An exquisite evening, from the sound of it...What a memory to have & hold...I missed hearing Maya Angelou read one night, since I was the night supervisor at the college library...My favorite Lit. prof got her to come & lecture in the mid-to-late 1980's...but I'd written her a poem & my teacher gave it to her...She autographed a flyer for me; it said "Wanda Lea - write on!" I beamed for days afterwards, so missing the lecture didn't ache quite so much...A grand piece for Al's contest...Good luck, my Friend... Wanda


  • RedAquarius
    May 4, 2007

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    This is a fabulous work, the format, the word pairings, everything contributes to bring to life an evening, one I wish I had been at. A truly powerful piece, IMHO. My only tiny peeve is the use of the ampersand, it's just personal preference for me not to use it.

    Just a fantastic, rich, vivid - compelling piece of work.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 4, 2007
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      thank you...

      i like the ampersand.. and i think it can be used well in poetry if people stick their necks out and think about its sounds and meaning...


      • RedAquarius
        May 4, 2007
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        I never thought about it having a sound, other than for the word 'and'. That's interesting and makes me think! Yay! I think I will go read up on it...thanks, NC!


        • NurseChilly gold member
          May 4, 2007
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          well, its when the two aspects between each side work to form a whole sentence or phrase well.. they must either be adjacent or opposed..

          eg: i regularly visit a pub called the slug & lettuce... ... see??? how they are opposed yet with the ampersand they come together


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    May 4, 2007
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    I have never heard poetry -- read. Not by a poet, not by anyone.. amusing really, isn't that? My only experience in that, is the few bits I've heard on online sites ..and I'm betting that's a pale substitute..

    I'm not sure I'd want to sit and listen to someone read about sex.. no, actually I know I wouldn't .. but you bring the moment of it to life.. among the animals in a very alluring way, enough so that I can feel the body heat and smell the scents of history.

    Good luck.. !


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 4, 2007
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      actually Lisa, even when she read some of her erotic pieces, it all seemed perfect and it wasn't sexual in a seedy way or made people feel uncomfortable.. infact it made people feel that night.. just a simple abilitly to feel life, love and sex in an open way...

      but more to the point, was when she talked about no breaking bread with some very high and influential writers and politians... as she didn't like what they stood for...

      she certainly moved my spirit that night


      • ArtFullyMe gold member
        May 4, 2007

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        oh I believe that.. I don't see it as smutty, not at all, nor dirty, or wrong, or any of those other fanciful things.. not one bit, I'm extremely liberal that way.. so trust me it's none of those things ..one might expect...

        it's ...err.. ( ooo I don't want to put this here -- it opens a huge can of worms ) .. in all honesty it's that it just doesn't interest me.. sigh.. I wish it did.. I do, but it doesn't.. and it's not because I dislike it, it just seems so done..and done and done and then it drones into... oh who the fuck...really cares..

        honesty is brutal eh?




        • NurseChilly gold member
          May 4, 2007

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          brutal is as honest as the day is long... and i respect it all in a good healthy way....

          and thank you thank you thank you



          yes

  • Damselflydreams
    May 4, 2007

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    Wow, sensual, palpable, very vivid and real, your insertion of yourself and your responses make this brilliant.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    A well written piece that places the experience at the podium and allows the reader to feel an exchange of osmosis almost as the eagerness and enthusiasm of the poets listen and learn from the speaker,daydreaming in the daliance of the dance of words and the desire to both look at the lecturn and appreciate but also to stand one day and invite the audience with own sights,sounds and smells of life and living via the spoken word.Superdooper!

    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 4, 2007
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      thanks Yvette... really

      • Yvette Champ gold member
        May 4, 2007
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        you're welcome & I am certain that when you perform your own creativity in such an arena that the audience will be just as spellbound,I know I would be delighted to hear you read your work and as the author you would know where to place the emphasis and bring all your pieces to life,from your manchester musings to sergei and angeline,yes count me in,I would love to be in your audience at your poetry reading


  • hotdog feet
    May 4, 2007
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    'I drowned in her mouth' is only one of the many terrific examples of good writing


  • Alexander Hine
    May 4, 2007

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    That almost sounds like a poeterotic experience.
    I love the feel and atmosphere of this piece. The repition of "In the museum" forms a nice meditation within the piece.
    Unfortunately much of the poem comes off as a little rushed. It is a little to free, even for free verse, and some of the formatting makes for awkward reading.
    Despite this you create some beautiful images, and the weaving together of art, food, sex and animality is truly effective.
    Well done,
    K. F.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 4, 2007
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      it was far from rushed... but you are entitled to your opinion... thanks for dropping by


      • Alexander Hine
        May 4, 2007
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        Sorry if I offended you, I was very tired when I wrote that so I may have been rash. And it only seemed rushed, it may not actually have been.
        regards,
        K. F.


  • veganmaster
    May 4, 2007
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    A nicely captured occassion, with a solid and worthy ending.


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    Beautiful poetry, Gill...on the wings of your words you transport the reader to feel the excitement and the thrill of that special poetry reading. I've never been to a poetry reading like this...and now I know what I've missed. Loved the way you became a part of her...all the sounds, the scents, the longing "to be the vowel on her tongue".

    Captivating this look you've allowed us from afar!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Alasar Minoko
    May 4, 2007

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    I am glad to see such dedication to such a momentous event indeed glad to hear you got to hear some works from a great poet . I had an event similar at my old high school great poet came in and it was a very mesmerizing experience. you almost made me feel like I was there it was a very well connected poem best of luck.

  • Nicole Hanna
    May 4, 2007

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    This is beautifl. I was captivated by the very fist line, and girl, you just didn't let up a bit. The final lines were incredibly animalistic and made me feel primal while reading it. Sad to say, save for this poem right now, I've never had the priviledge of pouting and preening for a poetess You make me jealous.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 4, 2007
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      ahh thanks hun.... it was like she was some kind of sexual snow white that night... if you can understand that, we were all captive to her soft silken charms...

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