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He Watches Me

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He Watches Me

Here I stand, on towering cliffs,

the majesty of my God’s gifts
Created by His mighty hand,

on towering cliffs, here I stand

I feel so small, as I stand here,

I know He’s there, I have no fear
Lending me strength so I feel tall,

as I stand here, I feel so small

Caresses my face, the ocean mist,

he loving breeze as I am kissed
The might and power of this place,

the ocean mist caresses my face

I know He watches over me,

as I stand here by the sea
His awesome splendors all aglow,

He watches over me I know

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Swap Quatrain

Each stanza in the poem must be a quatrain (four lines) where the first line is reversed in the fourth line. In addition, line 2 must rhyme with line 1, and line 3 must rhyme with line 4 and so on, BUT not repeat the same rhyming pattern on subsequent stanzas.
Rhyming pattern: AABB, CCDD, and so on.

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  • DesolatELifE
    June 19

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    I wanted to find out exaclty what a swap quatern (I assume that's another way of writing quatrain?) was. I came to the right place. Thanks.

    Excellent. Pretty.

    'Caresses my face, the ocean mist, t
    he loving breeze as I am kissed' - I'm guessing that 't' is in the wrong place.

    Wonderful, of course.


  • myrataal silver member
    September 3, 2007

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    Lovely Musicality.

    A divine solo, sung with millions and millions of angels in choir. Do you also long for Him with such deep yearning? Even though He is IN you? Sometimes I can but stand in awe at my own devotion, which I KNOW comes from HIMSELF.

    Yesterday I went to a concert of Song and Praise, where different choirs performed. The audience also joined in song and we had such fun! The orchestra gave their interpretation of several classical pieces, e.g. work of Bach and Mozart. Ah! that wondrous Air by Bach ... An afternoon very well spent.

    Lovely background, too.
    Beautiful, Amera.

    Love
    Myra


  • x Bright Eyes x
    June 30, 2007

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    hi i thought this was lovely and so nice loved reading this and enjoyed this so much thank you for entering and good luck


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    June 19, 2007
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    Absolutely Beautiful,

    Words, form, flow, I love it all. Beautiful background, enhances the serenity of this beautiful write. I am really impressed by the internal rhyme and constant flow of this piece. It is certainly worthy of applaud's, even accolade. I can only give 3 applauds, but here are 3 smiles to go with them


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 18, 2007
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    Beautiful words, picture, form, phrasing.

    God is goos, don't you think?


  • Swan song gold member
    May 13, 2007
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    This poem makes me feel comforted.


  • Random Thoughts
    May 11, 2007

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    Very well done poem indeed, I did notice it,
    Nice take on this picture,
    Best of luck and thanks for entering,

    -Brenden


  • love my jose luis
    May 10, 2007

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    Your background matches your poem perfectly, and so does the picture, many people can't place a backgound picture and poem that all go together, congratulations on that. I think that you did a great job writing this poem as well.
    ~Alix


  • Whoochi gold member
    May 8, 2007

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    Gorgeous new form, love it, the rhyme scheme is beautiful and magical...the words captured my heart and knowing he is here always and comapred to the ocean (well breing a water baby) you had me hook liner and sinker...Bravo! *heart*


  • sunny day
    May 7, 2007

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    OMG, I just saw the message you sent now and came directly to this piece. I love this form you have created here. I hope you are going to send it to shadowpoetry to have it added as a recognized form of poetry with the credit going to you. I am going to bookmark this so I can add the form to my little library. Your words captivated me from the title to the very last syllable of this majestic piece. Visions of loveliness as I felt Him watching over me. All my best wishes for you in the contest with what sounds like a golden write to me. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


    • Amera gold member
      May 7, 2007
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      What a beautiful comment Joyce, thank you.


  • manoguru
    May 6, 2007

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    this is interesting... do you have more poems written in this from... i think that the poem hasn't been able to use the full power of this form... each line contains about 15 syllables, which makes the reading slow... maybe shortening the line length will be of help


  • Armageden
    May 5, 2007

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    This is simply amazing.
    I loved every word
    Everything was just so... perfect.
    Great Write!


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    May 5, 2007

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    My wonderful friend..I dont know how you do it, but you never cease to amaze me with your form writing and your words. You truly are a gift to words as you put them in forms that give them glory. This was so wonderfully done and the flow was truly awesome.
    I was still trying to learn the other forms and now I have to try this one...
    Much love,
    Soulful Woman


  • Spiritvision angel
    May 5, 2007

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    The form is beautiful as well as the words that have such warmth and love in them. Heavenly in it's own right any friend.


  • hoodoolover silver member
    May 5, 2007

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    How utterly brilliant! I know how difficult it can be to do the internal rhyme schemes, well done my friend!

  • heartpour
    May 5, 2007

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    At times, we become fearful of things around us, but the realization that God, who created us, is always there giving us strength gives us great encouragement to stand "tall" in this world. Good meditation piece!

  • hazydreams
    May 5, 2007

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    Very good poem you have written here. Like the poem alot. Good title to your poem. The flow is very excellent. Best luck in the contest.


  • Never Fall in Love
    May 5, 2007

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    OMG
    This is amazing
    Damn you
    This is just too good
    I don't even know what to say because I'm so utterly speechless!!!
    I like this form so much, I'm willing to give it a try
    But there's a just a lil problem .. that'll be fixed
    Either way .. this is too good
    Perfect even
    I don't know where you come up with these things
    but it's all good

    Love ya lotz,
    You ap sis
    NeveR ♥


  • Shapla
    May 5, 2007
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    Awesome!!!!! This is indeed a thought provoking poem. I like the title.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    May 5, 2007

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    This is very beautiful and your form does create a perfect flow. You my dear are the Queen of form poetry.
    You do it with such easy and it is always perfect.
    PERFECT!!!

  • restful.soul
    May 5, 2007
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    wow really good write x good poe


  • CountryCousin
    May 5, 2007

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    This is beautiful.

    This is a beautiful poem indeed and one that any age person could read or listen to and enjoy. You did a splendid job on writing this piece.


  • Romily
    May 5, 2007
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    Amera, you have proved your talent agian. Indeed He watches us...Very brilliant writing.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    May 5, 2007

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    a great work inded...

    I know He watches over me, as I stand here by the sea
    His awesome splendors all aglow, He watches over me I know

    well my friend..it is indeed a heartwarming poem..what I feel while writing spirtual poems that if you talk about God then the beauty of words/beauty of metaphors/beauty of the language become just irrelevant when you add the most relevant and immortal subject in your work and that is the God..a great work indeed...




  • Rose Angel gold member
    May 5, 2007

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    Awesome!

    This just awesome!The greatness of the two backgrounds,makes us think of God behind the scene and then us on the beach..You have portrayed Gods' great love, in you being part of it all, and loving you and knowing you are there....The technical is all perfect...It always is...But the message is the greatest....Great Niece!


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    Beautiful...this brought tears to my eyes.
    Everything you write is treasured by me.
    Love, Lane


  • PerVirtuous
    May 4, 2007

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    Is there room on that rock for a picnic? I gave up my opportunity for lunch with the Queen, so I'm free this afternoon. Three bunnies for this wonderful write!!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    Amera, yes, he certainly watches over you because you are deserving, he watches over me because he's always suspicious I'm up to no good!

    very, very nice write, if this doesn't win, somethings wrong!



    Dad


  • painfully amazing
    May 4, 2007

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    wow..touching...its realy good... hopefully u'll win the contest=] you deserve to win..this is soo..wow...

    nooreo

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