I'm in love and the whole world knows.
So in love it definitely shows.
It's the way he calls my name,
the way he looks at me,
the way he brushes my mane
and, oh, the way answers my every plea.
A contest entry
- Why? 'Cause I'm in love. by Whispered Secrets.
550 points, ended May 14, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Let me know if my poem is wacked and wat i can do to improve it. thanks
Comments
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I think this is a good poem...I don't completely understand the mane thing. "the way answers my every plea" Doesn't exactly sum up the sentence properly. If you say "He" then you'll be set but...I'm not quite sure with this poem
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awww, how sweet..
the way he answers your plea right? ...lol..wow, this is pretty cute, i like it, you don't have to write so much to write a nice poem, you WROTE a SWEET one!! this is soooo honey-sweet..the Queen Bee would love it lol...really, i like it a lot!!! keep this up, this is a smooth piece of pebble found beneath the river!!! meaning, it's precious.
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