So I sat here preparing for my test and the feelings you provoke grew within my chest.
So I sit here, a year down the line; having, despite a fear, learned lessons so clearly dear.
Steadily inside my pulse resides, settled and soothed from struggle and strife.
Tamed and taxed, and taken back to tattered times and a timid mind.
I live afraid of what must be played; the events, which I made, displayed before me.
A change first came and lit a flame, but fate then came to reclaim that same change.
The sand will fall despite how tight I might hold, or how hard I might fight.
So here I sit, now soothed but scared of sights and sounds that were always there.
I miss what made me more, what mended madness, and molded amazing memories.
Soon it will be mine, and then again it will be gone; like a star it will shine before it’s withdrawn.
When it’s all done, and I’m at the end of what’s begun, I’ll look back at the one never outdone.
I’ll miss you then, as I do today, thinking of the tenderness that led me away from all that dismay.
If in a perfect world there is no you, I can guarantee, there would be no me.
In my version, there is only you and only I, just us two and no goodbye.
Please tell me what you think
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What a wonderfully written piece of work this is. I was really touched by the tenderness being delivered in these words, and the very last line was my favourite which i read a few times. You have a lot of love inside you, as well as fear and regret, but you keep it all together under one light, and that is the light for your love. Well done, my friend. keep up the good writing.
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excelent i liked this alot
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The flow and rhyme seemed a bit forced, but it is a great tribute to this person. It is just a little too cliche and greeting cardish for me. I could relate though.
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Thank you
Indeed the topic is as you say 'cliche,' but humanity will always deal with the same basic trials so I only stuck to what's really on our minds. Thank you for your time and honesty.
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Feels as if you let me journey through thoughts as they were occuring. Your last lines were excellent! This was a deep write with a tone of sadness and separation coursing through it. I was pleased to see a new post from you! Keep up the awesome work, this had a strong rhythm through it and was of course, my pleasure to read
~Tia
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Dear Tia
Your words are too kind, but thank you so much I really appreciated the rating, and it was an honor have had that write enjoyed by you. Good to see you again and thanks a million.
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