I have no duty but
to see the things that you
may have seen today or
yesterday, tomorrow-
Dreams that will never come.
Dreams that will never come,
and spread their will across
some barren, fruitless land.
Dreams finished before their
beginnings- left to die.
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Just trying out the pirouette form here.
Please tell me what you think
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Dreams finished before their beginnings- left to die. Being a linear thinker, this makes me ponder as well as wonder. I like the words although I'm not sure I understand.
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Hmmm...
Maybe it will help if I clarify?
I'm implying that before the dreams were even given a chance, they were shot down.
Thanks for the comment!
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a good peice, i am not familiar with this form, i will have to look it up sometime, i like the short form and the repetition i see.
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Hey this was great! I liked it. Very beautifully said too! Keep it up!
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Its a thought provoking write and I believed it worked out quite well, although I feel compelled to say that I have heard the line "barren, fruitless land" so many times before. That, I think, is my only peeve with this. Thanks for sharing with AP
-animated ♥
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