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resuscitation




is to appear in the April 2008 issue (6) of Mississippi Crow.





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Author notes

I just always feel the need to use this space for mindless drivel. Woo hoo.

Any ideas?

A contest entry

when dealing with writer's block... it seems to be what I write about most... go figure

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  • Nam
    August 9, 2007
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    em dash: —


  • Star Shine
    May 19, 2007

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    Ordered thoughts, yet with such freedom of expression. In touch with emotions and descriptions entangled as with your whisps of smoke. Well done.


  • RedAquarius
    May 19, 2007

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    Superb use of personification, subtle use of details that brings the scene to mind clearly - it's as if two poems are fighting to come forth, one about a former love and one about writing yet they fight for creation and so merged here. Fascinating.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    May 19, 2007

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    Impressive - Very Creative!!!

    Annalise, I really enjoyed reading your "mindless" masterpiece of "drivel." I especially love these lines:

    that year I tried to find love
    stashed behind
    the zippers of strangers.

    Your muse is working overtime... where does she find the inspiration for these colorful love poems? I'd say you're back in the saddle, Lady!!! Take care, Peace and Love, Cyn


  • Danna Hobart
    May 18, 2007

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    Wow, you really accomplished something with this poem. I felt as though I had reached an epiphany only to have it snatched away, which seems to be what you were going for, so kudos on that- not an easy thing to do.


  • dking
    May 9, 2007

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    How do you do that?

    I feel like you've stepped aside of your own stream of thought and took notes on what you saw. You make it look easy, but I know it's not. This seems to be a common theme/form for you and you do it well. Another winner!


  • Zayra Yves
    May 6, 2007
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  • bw43
    May 4, 2007
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    hehe i like this. nice piece for having writer's block.


  • soulfultia gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    Love this metaphoric piece and love when someone steps out and actually writes of poetry itself...or the attempt to write it. I think within your lines lie not only your spirit but the spirit of many on here (Ahmmmm...like me) who have creative spurts...I try to avoid the words "writer's block", then it seems I have more work to do to tear that down! So I let my creativity flow when it can...the "Sporadic Poet" I'll say , that's me! Loved your write, wonderful read form me this evening! ~Tia

  • Desert Knave
    May 4, 2007

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    I found parts of this so familiar and loved the imagery of the tiptoes and flitting out of reach. Much of the time when I try to write I feel like poesy is just outside the window mocking me. ~Jim

  • Son of Jim
    May 4, 2007

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    Two really good similes, quite a few metaphors and loads of imagery.
    I liked the freshness of strangers zippers reference, the inability of the narrator to touch, earned secrets.
    Writing on inspiration or writing is something I just don't do, because it is so hard to bring to life. Well you have accomplished that for sure hear. Great job, I enjoyed!
    Jim


  • misselaineous
    May 4, 2007

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    how i know this...
    writing about writers block for me just allows a freefall and ideas come
    so , as in this case, you do not have writers block, you unstopped the cork and the words came ...
    nice words they are too...


  • passionvine
    May 3, 2007

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    Everest

    The white page is an Everest. I would rather do anything (and will procrastinate at length before starting that clim than write.

    If you are going for speech ignore the suggestion that follows:

    "should I of touched his skin"

    is more properly "should I have touched his skin"

    This is good exercise and produces much

    my first play started with the words "nothing nada nichts nil" in a fit of writer's block.

    Peace.


  • poet2angels gold member
    May 3, 2007

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    perfection

    This needs no critique...
    It is brilliant as always, so seeeeee you never lost your muse, it was just hiding from ya to pop out and create this masterpiece when it was ready...


    You are amazing...

    Lynda

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 3, 2007

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    I am dealing with writers block myself.

    I love the idea of a "Great Poem" -

    sorry that I can't really offer any constructive critique - I am dry.

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