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Aquatic Dual

 



I.

Raging river

of empathic intuitiveness

assists healing hands

laid upon the less fortunate

riddled with inflictions.

 

Chameleon character

brings comforting communication;

tender heart

-compassion's chasm-

fills and spills sensitive insight

to emotional spirits.


 

 

II.

Pampered premonitions

of romance roam

in seclusion's sanctity;

in reality,

relinquished upon lover

with erotic offerings.

 

Moments of exquisite bliss

sprung forth from alluring spirituality;

subservient mate unfurls

numerous acts of selfless adoration.


 

 

III.

Imagination spawns poetry

from fairy tale fantasies

lived within self's cerebral cortex,

an artistic labyrinth.

 

Sequestered thoughts

of creativity fight

for emergence

from twinned fish

with tails chained.



Author notes

Written about the zodiac sign Pisces.

Picture credit: Pisces by Josephine Wall

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  • queens1
    July 31, 2007

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    Stunningly beautiful

    Oh my, this is wonderful. "Chameleon character" is so much like my brother, it surprised me.
    Thank you for entering and good luck!


  • Tangled Angle
    May 24, 2007

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    You covered the trait flawlessly.
    There are three other people who did really well this round, but one of those three and you are the two that are consistently doing excellent each round.
    I like how in the ending the intensity grew, and the line breaking went from normal, and then the last stanza it got down to 2-3 word lines. It really built it up and your ending had a great emphasis. Nicely done.


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    May 19, 2007

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    I can't say what I obtain from reading your spiritual writes, it's just amazing. The picture is absolutely beautiful you have penned an amazing spiritually balanced piece here mum.
    Love you much,
    Lil

  • in-the-twilight
    May 4, 2007

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    This is really great... Pisces huh? I'm a gemini! Great poem though... you're amazing with words! Rock on! xoxo Meg


  • poetryality silver member
    May 4, 2007

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    Love that last stanza dear heart. This is flawless. It makes me think of my delightful grandson. He is all this, and so much more... and just five years old exhibiting these traits already Excellent. I wish you well in this Round love.


    Always ♥

    Mom


  • wolfspiritguide gold member
    May 3, 2007
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    this is wonderful.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    May 3, 2007

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    A totally cool and awesome write, Bel! Wow! I LOVE this; it's unique, it's brilliant, and it's a damn fine poem! Thanks for sharing you, sweetie!

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