Wild as the Wind
She is wild as the wind and you can’t take her down
She knows were she’s going and she ain't turning around
The world is her pastern she runs as she goes
The sky is the limit to how fast she flows
Wild as the wind, strong as thunder
She fly’s like an eagle she shines like the sun
She will never stop till her quest is done
Wild like storm she moves across the land
She glares at the stars and they give her hope
Then she moves on to see her self and stickseed
She will never see what she really needs
Wild as the wind,stroug as thunder
She cries like a baby but never gives in
She will never stop till her time is up
As fast as a bullet souring in the air
She knows she will never make it there
For her dream to find peace in reality
Is to sort for a horse to see
In a list
A contest entry
- OH MY ODE Contest by Olivias Violin.
330 points, ended September 2, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I can see why this won!!!
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speachless
i love it!!!!!!
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Good!
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This is really pretty! I like how you described her so that I could see it happening in my mind. I like this!
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In your second line the word "ante" should be aint or rather isn't and make the word aroud "'round" as to give it more flow; not that it doesn't have enough already. "pastern" I think should be "pasture"
Your rhyme in the flow/goes lines are stunnig.
Usually I'm no good with it, but I can respect a talented poet.
Your second stanza shines just as bright as the first. Good imagry to boot. Maybe instead of using wild again you should use fierce in the stanza about the storm. You've already used it, and expandature of vocabulary is critical for aspiring writers. I think "stickseed" should be succede? I'm not enirely sure though, but nice thought if so.
Your last lines are very very nice. I like the way you almost seemed to fall into those lines. Very good job and poem. Look forward to reading more of your work.
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Wow this is really impressive.. Its a real nice poem. Alot of expressive words and i like it basically. I also like the rhyme an free flow idea very nice keep it up
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Awesome!!!
I love this one sweetheart! I loved it even more hearing you sing it aloud! I hope "Spirit" and horses always inspire you to write such beautiful words ... very well done!
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