The dark dementia
that lingers in your mind,
asphyxiates on the
disolving pictures of
a haunting past.
Your memories,
just a carbon copy
of what you long for.
The blackened sky,
transpiring moonlit madness
deep into your soul.
Your sanity hanging only
by stitched strands
of chicken wire.
Your chosen solitude
awaits you.
Frozen in time,
lost in your own paranoia.
Casting out your
own regular irregularities,
trying to find your
lost prismatic personality.
Anger and hatred
now define who you are.
The demons you carry
now preside over you.
Your own crimes,
justifiably tried to
your own liking.
This outcome,
inevitably predicted
by your own failures.
Nuturing the wounds
of self infliction,
hiding behind this
profound polished persona.
As you leave behind your own,
a marbled legacy
that will forever
be set in stone.
Author notes
Lacrymosa by Evanescence
Ktulu Blackwolfe
In a list
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- Written for challenges • next in list
A contest entry
- Self-Analysis by High-on-Death.
600 points, ended August 5, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Evanescence Lyrics Prompt by EiramDK.
750 points, ended January 24, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Giant Evanescence Contest by Nienna Calmcacil.
1300 points, ended September 17, 41 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow. I can definitely relate to this...(maybe that's a bad thing, but whatever.)
Anyway. Your word choice was absolutely amazing. I was stunned by the end of the poem. Some much emotion and imagery! You certainly read the rules
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Wow. I love the discription and imagery. The stong words make it so powerful.
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I love the first stanza, it leaves to interpretation and uses some wonderful metaphors and choice of words. I would read this over and over again to find a different meaning each time.
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Your description is amazing and the imagery strong and vivid. It leaves you thinking afterwards and wanting to read more. Thanks for entering
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This is what I'm talking about. This is completely your own poem. It's amazing. I really enjoy the imagery and the flow and everything. This is a really great write. Alyssa
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I feel these words echo torment in my soul and I loved the use of the word dementia, what a problematic conundrum that often comes of old age and years of confusion and hurt... or so I've heard
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A poem that makes you think about yourself and whether or not you're happy with it. Thank you for entering this strong piece into my contest.
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Wonderful write! I love the line "Your sanity hanging only by stitched strands of chicken wire." Very visual and well written. Thank you for entering my contes and good luck!
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well written I like all the words fitting together as they did Painting the piture of an unbalanced mind. good luck in the contest
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Thank you, thank you, thank you for making this easy on me. I saw a lot of anger, bitterness within the write...more toward the end of a 'failed' life. I really like the flow and it emotes well. -
Well lil brother you have done well once again in defending your title thus far by incorporating in this word banks so well. Your dark side has truly come out to make itself known in this round. One might dare to be scared of how your mind works when molding a word bank such as this into a piece of poetic artistry.
Well Done!
Blessings
Bel
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Thank you Sis for this round. You know me by now to know I love my dark writes. LOL Especially when I have something I want to get out..lol
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ok so ya frozen chicken...
but...
TO MANY BIG WORDS!!!!!!!!!!
and very long!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
but other than that kinda confuzing but still good...
luv ya,
±a n g e l e y e s±
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Had to read it twice..(could be from lack of sleep) .. It's a poem that leaves me thinking and I love that. Nice use of the word bank.
~Kitten~
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very good write you have done here, you fit the word bank in nicely and good luck.
Love you much
Elizabeth
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this is impressive my friend, creative and impressive, keep it flowing, was this a challenge or something, if so you must have passed it
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Difficult word bank, I am impressed with the out come--Good luck in the contest ~Pastel
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i love the word bank that you have used... please tell me this was just for a contest and is not really how your mind sees things?
well done on an intense write all the same
cheers
Jen
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Theres this 'lingering' after-effect that the mind ponders of which the compensated levels have dared yet to reach. keep penning
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Wonderful piece good word useage too
Keep it forever flowing lobo
Roses to you
Teresa
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