Please don't abandon my heart aching
As I suffocate from Love's distance
Silence can be so penetrating
With the rejection of repentance
This battle within, seeps through my mind
As the thoughts I ponder into seep
To where my heart traced in rewind
On concrete floors, my eyes gently weep
I cannot bear, no more bitterness
For I've tasted; rushing, bloody streams
Could I be more, if I just confess
You're my antidote for broken dreams
I beg, please polish, my tainted soul
Salvage any good you ever saw
Inside, I'm so weak, please mend me whole
For you're the reason I breathe at all
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Thanks for reading me, much love, Timothy~
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Awesome!
This is such a great read and write. Keep the beautiful heart and soul penning these beautiful writes.
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Profound!!!
This is such a thought-provoking and beautifully written love poem - I wish I had written it!!! I am impressed and look forward to reading more of your talent!!! As they say here on AP, Write on, Shine on!!! Peace and Love, Cyn
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~Beautifully Penned and REAL, my friend Timothy~
Bravo,
to your artistic brilliance as you unleash your emotions
A gifted, talented artist paints in black a true life “Battle”
Ah, how I wish so much more for you
Commanding excellence in your poetic words here there everywhere.
God bless you for being able to capture true and aching emotions.
I am deeply moved with the comment and wisdom of Chris,
How clearly he sees, that a soul must experience complete devastation on the way to being reconstructed in the light.
Thank you for being a friend of mine,
I can sum up my entire life in this line,
On concrete floors, my eyes gently weep
As I search forever in my soulful sleep
Namaste Blessed be to you and yours eternally, Love Sharon~
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This is a very emotional, deep piece. I love it because I totally know the battle of which you speak. I've been there too many times! Beautiful flow and rhymes. Great job. Thanks for sharing and thanks for entering. Best wishes. Take care!
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Wow. So deeply deeply emotional! It's beautiful!! Especially great ending! Great rhyme and flow. I understand that battle you're writing of. I've been there. Great write. Thanks for sharing and thanks for entering my contest. Best wishes. Take care.
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Oy!
Powerful piece penned from the Heart Sweet Soul
Only wish You Happiness for You Touch so many with
Your words that You speak
Keep that ink flowing~~ and
that Mind of Yours going
Appreciate all You do
Many blessings to You!
Best wishes too
and much love~ Des~*~
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I understand
this poem, in fact I feel this poem.
smile,
Judy C. Meeker
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Very sad Timothy
I wish you a better day than this one. I have been there and was miserable as your poem speaks. It is painfull to even remember those times.
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Sometimes we have to be reduced to less than nothing, before we can be re-built again. It isn't The Light's favorite passtime, but often de do not leave any other choice. As long as we exist inside this physical plane there will be pain, things to learn and hope to cherish. Even when we are down and out. That is done for us and will take place at the proper time, in the right place, never too early, never too late. And while await such events from taking place we write poems such as these to help us survive the hardship we endure, praying to become whole. Thank you for creating and sharing, my friend and good luck in the contest. Take care,
Chris
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This well just .....torn my heart strings. My dear sweet soul, his was a sad yet, well penned piece full of emotion. Strong impact from beginning to end.
(tears)
Love ya
Victoria
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SMOKIN'!!!!!!!
LOVES it!!!!! I'm feeling this -----all the way to the concrete face-plant (tears included)! Love is grand, but bitterness---now that's eternal!
Love you like nobody's business!
K-to the-I-to the-M
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Totally awesome, my love brother...totally awesome! Your heart speaks loud and clear within every line and it shows...awesomely and beautifully!
Such tender longing; the heart pleading so openly...wow
All the best to you in this contest!
Love ya much,
Sister Sandy
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