the girl violently screams
I don’t know what to do
I wait
I panic
I think
I feel lost in the belly of a deep crow
surrounded by a forest of grey
I feel pain
I feel tears
I feel strong
I burst out trying to find a calming way
the putrid path quickly curves
I’m lost
I’m sad
I’m gone
I abruptly sit and softly cry to the shadows
they just laugh at me
grey
red
black...
White
Author notes
this is a poem about a guy going crazy, could you see it?
i entered your contest cause u entered mine!
2. DARK
~write me something that is dark or gory or BOTH! I am a slave for the dark ones...
~crazy~
A contest entry
- What does it mean to be ALONE? by WhenWillsCollide.
575 points, ended May 30, 2007, 60 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Okay Darkies and Morbid Feet Draggers...Come on in! by Rianna Bear.
450 points, ended May 28, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is something truly unique. thanks so much for your entry!
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haha, is that a good thing?
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yeah. sorry for the tight lipped comment!! It has taken me so long to come back to this and judge, i'm trying to be quick. sorry!! 
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idk y but it reminds me of the raven poem we read at the beging of the year
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very intersting...
I believe I went crazy while reading this poem.
I liked the use of hte spacing and spaces between stanzas. it helped to give the piece "attitude"
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very good
when you cry into the shadows you never know who or what is there living or in the spirit great write keep doing well
love the papa
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hmm
This really makes one think. Very subjective and open to interpretation. I like the ending effect and the pattern you used to make this flow. Very nice. Keep up the great work!
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Short and Sweet
For so few words the poem does surprisingly well
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tyvm!
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Wow. This is really good. AT first it didn't make sense but now it does. Great job!!!
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