I am ashamed that it has come to this and all that needs to be said is muted
With our eyes we saw only shame and with sewn lips we knew better didn't we
We knew that in the end we were going to have to tell someone
And it seemed that that someone was us
Blinded and stranded I thought I knew everthing
Thought I knew how the world worked and the ways of manipulation
Until we saw the truth that threatened to rip us apart
It eventually did
I broke down and so did you. Do you remember?
Our tears flooded the barren path we had layed
Arms intertwined, we fell and layed our heads down
To die and start over. Or is it that simple?
Tell me what was the first thing that came to your mind
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damn se. that was good. im not sure on who you are talking about. but this poem is deep. i heart it. yep yep. good write. and is also good to see that you keep on writing. :]
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Good write Greenie23. I've been to that crossroads where all the truths come out, the hidden secrets, the cheating and hurt. You have expressed this well. Its never that simple and the pain is always there. Thanks for sharing this write.
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this seems like a different side, maybe i just need to get used to you not writing erotica all the time, because i guess that's what i`m used to, i`m not very good at these comment things, but it was nice, i really like the second stanza too. niceee. <3
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I know it is different but it speaks of something that I needed to say. Thanks for the comment, love ya
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Compelling
Now this is very powerful. Mostly because I can really feel it and relate. Once again that brilliance from you has caught me, Se. That second line is what gets me..."...we knew better didn't we?" It just so happens that the song I wrote is called "No more shame." This almost reminds me of that. I love this.
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