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New LIfe Begun

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Oh cursed light of midday sun,

That has my hiding place undone

And sent me on my fatal run

That’s just begun, that’s just begun.

That I may rue for all my days

My vicious thoughts and hateful ways,

Of flaunting rules and strict mores,

That oft betrays, that oft betrays

And hides me in its vile deceit,

To leave me feeling incomplete,

And swallowed by abject defeat,

So bittersweet, so bittersweet,

That’s like a cruel platitude,

That in the past so often wooed,

Deceiving me with things pursued,

An interlude, an interlude,

That soon is gone, like setting sun,

For I, its plot, has now undone,

And overcome my fatal run –

New life begun, new life begun.

Author notes

Different form and kind of fun. Enjoyed this one.

Hahaha - wrote this for a contest and after I posted it, I noticed the theme was romance. So, withdrew it. I'm a dork!

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  • Ellis gold member
    November 27, 2007
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    Epiphany

    Salvation


  • SexyAngel0418
    June 2, 2007

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    awesome poem!!! You did a great job on this one!!! really like it!! Keep up the great work!!!

    Hugs,
    beth


  • mitchybaby
    May 4, 2007

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    Lol you are not a dork...but that did make me laugh...great write here dad...I love the way this one flows, it's so beautiful...lots of big words that I don't understand completely...heehee


  • Gatlianne
    May 4, 2007
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    ooooo

    Very much well done


  • Arrianna MacEwan
    May 4, 2007

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    This is such a beautiful poem my dear friend. You have such an amazing way with eloquence and with the words you choose. I love your works. great write!


  • Veronica Leigh gold member
    May 3, 2007

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    wow grandpa paul, this is beautiful. I LOVE the way you did the last line of every stanza. BEAUTIFUL. It almost seemed like a song, but not at the same time. I don't know. It was just really beautiful as always.


  • Grey Mouser
    May 3, 2007

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    Yes, this form is quite enjoyable to read and to write in. It sings to the ear, when read. This should have been some good practice for you. Missed one rhyme in the second stanza.

    Very well done.
    Mouser

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