what am i to do now
with these plastic lies && black secrets
im suffocating in the dark that surrounds me
i've found the releasing ladder
but im stuck in the empty[hollow]pit
of nothing but betrayl[i've been here too many times before]
what do you call us? And why is this happening?
we dont matter anymore-
nothing matters anymore- is that it?
-you're confused;you're lost-
i think you're numb
and your lies are the chains
that suffocate you in the dark of night
but you told me you didnt lie
can i believe that lie?
you're shooting my life away
with you're rusted bullets of love
and your ragged dagger of trust
it's making me bleed[inside && out]
telling me all these things that i would probably hide
im now taking those sunked pills of exhaustion
but the vodka doesnt burn anymore.
is it immunity or just perfection
that i've scarred&bruised;;
bled&&betrayed for love?
the navy shadows on my back are priceless
the etched in[stitched up]scars
are from his crimson wire that is holding me still
but is it fair for me to feel
all this overwhelming abandon at once?
im not who i used to be
and im sorry she was lost
in all this unforgiving light
im not the one you[he]fell for at the start
im sorry for saying im sorry[does it mean anything?]
these words are said to much
and im only bleeding slowly[in the lies of different colors]
the vodka is burning this last&&final time
and im suffocating on your lies
that are your chains of entanglement
im a pretty little[twisted hollow]girl
who deserves just everything you've given me
[[the tears dont burn like they used too]]
m. m. o'malley
5-1-07
Author notes
“And Your Lies Are The Chains That Suffocate You”
i used titles #2,3,410&11 as lines and #11 as a title and i used all the words in the wordbank but i changed some of them up.
hope you like it.
for those who know the story, let me know if you can see chad in the couple of places he fell into.
A contest entry
- Title Me With Lies by Immer Leben.
450 points, ended June 2, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
should it hurt this much to love him?
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'you're shooting my life away
with you're rusted bullets of love
and your ragged dagger of trust
it's making me bleed[inside && out]
telling me all these things that i would probably hide
im now taking those sunked pills of exhaustion
but the vodka doesnt burn anymore.
is it immunity or just perfection
that i've scarred&bruised;;
bled&&betrayed for love?
the navy shadows on my back are priceless
the etched in[stitched up]scars
are from his crimson wire that is holding me still
but is it fair for me to feel
all this overwhelming abandon at once?
im not who i used to be
and im sorry she was lost
in all this unforgiving light
im not the one you[he]fell for at the start
im sorry for saying im sorry[does it mean anything?]
these words are said to much
and im only bleeding slowly[in the lies of different colors]
the vodka is burning this last&&final time
and im suffocating on your lies
that are your chains of entanglement'
^^^ love those two stanzas,
I'm sorry you feel like this... gosh how much can i relate.... hmmmmmm
ALOT =[ not a great feeling but defintely a great peom =] ♥
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wow, thanks baby for this. i personally loved this poem, but id think the judge did much. oh well...right?
this is a horrible feeling and im sorry you have to go through it as much as im sorry i got mixed up in it too.
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Not bad. Very good. I think it would have been just a bit better if it rhymed. But other then that, very good write. Thank you for entering.
~S~
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im not much on rhyming. i guess i just dont like the sound because it seems to flow just a little too perfectly.
but im glad you liked it in a sense.
happy judging
[[Chaos]]
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Wow babe, this is amazing...I don't know the story about chad, but I still saw a few places where someone who hurt you could fit in. I really liked this part:
"im not who i used to be
and im sorry she was lost
in all this unforgiving light
im not the one you[he]fell for at the start
im sorry for saying im sorry[does it mean anything?]
these words are said to much
and im only bleeding slowly[in the lies of different colors]
the vodka is burning this last&&final time
and im suffocating on your lies
that are your chains of entanglement
im a pretty little[twisted hollow]girl
who deserves just everything you've given me
[[the tears dont burn like they used too]]"
It's beautiful hunny, and sad. Good luck in the contest babe!
ily!
Xx
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thanks so much baby. i liked the last part of it the most too. it seemed to have the most effect on summarized the whole poem in general. the story about chad and i is really complicated, we were together for a year off and on and he loved me, but he left me to protect me in a sense cause he leaves for iraq and what not. he thought it would help but i still hold on because i know he still loves me(the chains that hold me)
so yeah, im really happy you liked it.
ily2
♥Love
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I can totally see where he falls into....I feel the pain/emotions and this is great! Love the whole poem and good luck in the contest! I love ya
<3 Jenerali
P.S. if I do get blocked, I will be posting stuff on my page for every one of you guys -
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thank you baby for everything.
hes everything you know...we talked yesterday...and i told him i havent let him go and i told him about this poem and he was surprised about it but he loved it too =]]
i love you too. and im gonna miss you like crazy
♥Chaos
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