Slip your mind
inside my thoughts,
let's drift through
careless dreams,
where a worried
world ne'er glances,
and we make love
amongst scented meadow
flowers, and lay naked
in the sun.
In a list
A contest entry
- Seduce me Ladies!! (CONTEST) by DeadofKnight.
525 points, ended May 13, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Amazing
Beautiful description! I love the ne'er. The title is great, it really draws me in. I love the first 4 lines, they are a great introduction to the poem. Keep writing! -
beautiful
aw this is lovely jan, I love "and we make love amongst scented meadow flowers, and lay naked in the sun", so whimsical, well done ma friend!
Alex.
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I like the imagery you used in this poem. I know the brevity of the poem was part of your plan, but I wish the poem was like a stanza longer. It is still a good write.
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First off, I love the imagery. Always wanted to make love amongst meadow flowers. Wonderful words captrued so very well. Thank you for the entry and good luck.
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this was enchanting
Here words written where a whispering enchantment
and one that reads this flows into it as making love,
so sweet the lyrical verve here ...I felt its touch..
a jewel lyrical..loved it as a sweet strawberry in my mouth..
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Gently erotic and definitely seductive--who could fail to be enticed by such an invitation? Excellent work.
Bill
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Aw alas young love, how sweet your words expresses it...
The word here in are captivating and mesmerizing.... The reader in imported into it's essence and allowed to smell the flower and experience the lover's touch...... I can only say, I have enjoyed visiting with your work this day.... I gave me great pleasure to read your poem!!!
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ah sweet love, sounds very calm and gentle here, rolling across nature's wise wide eyes, a good poem
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