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Released 2

Whispers falling upon my ear
telling me my greatest fear
things that I don't want to hear
I fight to be Released

Tied against a wooden Pyre
condemned for being such a liar
Retribution in the form of Fire
I yearn to be Released

Pain emanating from my chest
Please remember me at my best
The one who has fail her quest
I searched to be Released

I trusted you as a friend
I was disappointed again
why in misery do all things end?
Will I ever be Released?

But even in all of your lies
truth was betrayed in your eyes
I was the one who you despise
I deserve to be Released.

Damned for an eternity
It has become so clear to me
Destruction is my destiny
I will never be released

 

 

 

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  • Barely Breathing gold member
    July 19, 2007

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    This is such a deep, dark poem that you have done in true style. I love the rhyme of this, its done so different. And it has such a great flow and the imagery is great. Well done for such a great write.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    July 16, 2007

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    Damned for an eternity
    It has become so clear to me
    Destruction is my destiny
    I will never be released

    Well this is really a sad verse here touching the depth of the heart of yours my friend..your words are just tearful bringing a kind of the aloofness in the
    expression..I loved,though, the flow of the write which is truely very effective and very moving as well..its depth and the intensity of the thoughts which are just wonderful with its vision and its definate impact ..well done my friend..a great poem is here..



  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    July 4, 2007

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    Great work here and thanks
    for sharing this one. Keep
    up the wonderful work here!




    Jeremy0826


  • cognitivedistortion
    July 3, 2007
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    I don't really like poems with really repititous rhyme schemes but this one was OK. I think it was the subject matter more then anything, and the strong imagery.

  • tattyhead
    June 27, 2007
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    loved it

  • selfdenial
    May 9, 2007

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    Sweet

    It follows the same form as the first released. (wow I had to type released like four million times to get it right) It's wonderful, even though you need to fix one thing...the second line in the last stanza....somethings wrong with it.
    Other than that it's awesome.


  • paullallady silver member
    May 6, 2007

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    wow, this is a most powerful poem, very strong, very deep. It is touching in its sadness, speaking of the betrayal. The rythm and flow were absolutely perfection. wonderful job on this. I love it.

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