Flawless
I was once so perfect in your eyes.
To you my only flaw was the way I look at myself.
Fearless
In your arms I was not afraid.
I was safe.
No one could hurt me.
I couldn’t hurt myself.
Careless
I only saw you.
You only saw me.
It didn’t matter what anyone else thought.
There was only us.
Thoughtless
I was willing to fix it.
But you were willing to throw it all out.
Emotionless
I can no longer read you like I used to.
You’re so indifferent now.
Indifferent to me.
Indifferent to everything.
Faithless
How can I believe anything you say?
How can I trust you with my heart now that I know what you’d do with it?
Sleepless
When I sleep I dream of us together.
When I wake up, I realize that it will never be that way.
So I lie awake.
Meaningless
How do you think what you’re doing makes me feel?
Did I mean nothing to you?
Your actions speak louder than your words.
Helpless
I can’t help but feel this way, when all I turn to is suddenly gone.
No one else will ever be there the way you were.
Useless
What’s the point in pretending that things will be the same one day?
I know that’s not what you want.
Hopeless
Pretending gets me nowhere.
I’m back to where I started.
Alone.
Worthless
Unwanted
Unneeded
Unloved
Worthless
Is all I am now…
Is all I’ll ever be.
Author notes
Breaking up sucks. Nuff said.
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wow
this is amazing!
i loved the feeling of degrading! it was so THERE.... which is really sad. but very well done poetically
for me it would have been more clearer if the adjectives were separated into categories. or at least with spaces. but i guess that's part of the writing style too. so i'm totally find with it.
awesome write!
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So sad so beautiful and so perfect. The imagery is incrediable and I feel your pain and your love as I read this!! It's inspiting and flow so nicely. This poem described me so much it's hurts. My favorite part was
I only saw you.
You only saw me.
It didn’t matter what anyone else thought.
There was only us.
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Well, this piece...I can totally relate to it. It is exactly how I felt after my boyfriend cheated on me[with three other girls]....and he is now, delightfully, my ex. I don't feel cheap and actually feel as strong as can be right now, so I know you can get through this. I mourned for about a month. Your words, they speak through emotions and much more. They speak of how a relationship starts, and how once your heart is thrown away by a certain guy, it ends. I hope that you never have to go through that again...it is so hard to deal with. I now remember why you were on my favorites. After looking at this piece, I wonder why I haven't read your poetry more often, for it is of much talent. Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!
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Awww thanks so much. I'm glad you liked it and I'm sorry that your boyfriend cheated on you. I don't know why guys are so immature. This piece is about my THREE year relationship coming to an end. I can't believe he just threw it all away.
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Emotional abuse is one of the worst to go through, because sometimes people just don't see whats going on and you feel so alone. I love the change of emotion you have here as the abuse drives on. thank you for entering
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Damn,damn,damn...Did you have to remind me? I was pretty much over that feeling... Damn,damn,damn...
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Yes, it's pretty bad when I'm a guy, and I hate men.
At least the emotional abuse is over, but the sad thing is, I'm still so in love with him *sigh*
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Amazing!
This poem really spoke to me. My boyfriend of 11 months dumped me 2 nights ago. I'm so in love with him, and he threw it all away. Sad thing is, he dumped me 3 nights after my grandmother died. Your poem really speaks to me, and it was an excellent read. You covered all of my emotions. Wow! -
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Well, my heart goes out to you. I am still recovering from this heartache and was dumped a few days after I told him I've been feeling alone even when I'm not because a couple years ago that month my dog was put to sleep.
Guys have pretty horrible timing don't they?
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wow.
this really spoke to me, i love the way in which you wrote this, its so... in depth, and it flows, it does.
congrats for a great poem.
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Alone.
Worthless
Unwanted
Unneeded
Unloved
Worthless
Is all I am now…
Is all I’ll ever be.
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Wow... you've captured so much here in this poem... I like this ending the best; it captured a great deal of my own feelings... Welcome to Je Veux Que Tu Saches -- or rather, I Want You To Know... Let me know if you never need anything. <3 Zach
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I'm gobsmacked! i love how you've used the single words on a line. They may be small but they're so expressive. It really gets your mind thinking. two thumbs up!
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