Inside together, forever apart
A deep hole that’s left in my heart
No more concepts to figure out
Nothing left to be disturbed about
And for once no tears to over pout
No more pain to drive me insane
Only the splatter of blood to slain
Isn’t my suffering just enough?
Is it my disguise that makes you un-tough?
There’s nothing anyone can do
I need your love to help me through
Misery I held, you said to give to you
So much love has filled my mind
To escape, there isn’t enough time
So to you I give away my hate
My companion, My partner… My mate
Author notes
This poem is about a time when I was suffering and going through a lot of stuff… The guy I’m with helped me through it all “Inside together, forever apart
A deep hole that’s left in my heart” In this line I’m not stating that I don’t have him anymore. I moved about 1300 miles away, and I don’t now when I’ll get to see him again (I haven’t seen him in two years) imagine how hard that is and you’ll understand the deep hole in my heart…
A contest entry
- Why? 'Cause I'm in love. by Whispered Secrets.
550 points, ended May 14, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like this a lot. You've got the emotional aspect covered and poetically, it flows nicely and the rhyme works really well. I don't know that I would be able to deal with a long distance relationship...maybe I just haven't found a guy thats worth it.
Best Wishes,
-ChildeOfChaos-
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Heh.
I know all about the 'deep hole' my boyfriend lives in IL. I'm in NJ. That's pretty far apart, not sure how many miles. Still, we talk to each other and I love him.
Well,
thanks for submitting your poem.
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I like the story behind the poem, and the emotion it stirs, although I don't think you had to put the entire summary like that because your poem really speaks for itself.
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wow x that must be hard for you x long distance relationships suck dont they? tried it once but unfortunately he didnt have the patience x love your poem and im not sure i shud have bothered entering now hehe youll deffo beat me anyday x
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