I was out in the rain today
Not caught off guard
I was walking through the forest
The trees a verdant green
Mountains surrounded by fog
Birds were singing cheery songs
It smelled of earth and flowers
Then the sky began to weep
Not out of pain or suffering
It was telling me a story
The drops plummeted down
Enclosing me in its comforting drizzle
It's tale was one of peace
Full of life and comfort
A haven amidst the world
Wars and fighting and hate
I wish I could have stayed
Each drop washing away
The filth of struggle
Like God's forgiveness
It washed me wet and clean
Like God's love
Covering and drenching me
So I understood once again
I must be immersed in God.
Author notes
I was caught in the rain yesterday. I had been out taking a walk. The rain started falling, yet the clouds were not heavy and dreary, the sun was slightly shining. It was really beautiful. I really felt God's presence.
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Ah, soothing and very inventive in your narrative. I like walking in rain, in the woods too. The scent of the earth an flowers and the cheery singing of the birds are all so familiar. Very nice.
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Wonderful
Very creative and well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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a very, calm peaceful poem. thank you for entering.
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good metaphor, must admit i don't agree completely but we all have our opinions
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Thank you for your lovely entry, Josephine
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Very powerful poem i think=) i like it very much
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Very simply written but with a much stronger, more powerful message. *hug*s and best wishes ~Genie~
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Interesting piece to be certain, nice flow to it Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e 
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This is a beautiful poem. I love your descriptions of nature. It makes me want to stand out in the rain in a forest lol. It sounds so lovely. It reminds me of the quote "God is in the rain". Wonderful, beautiful poem. Keep it up and good luck in the contest.
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great
I especially like "the sky began to weep
Not out of pain or suffering" and "Each drop washing away
The filth of struggle" and the ending.
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