I'll Cross My Heart,
Hope To Die,
Stick A Dirty Razor In My Vein,
I'll Watch The Blood Pour Out,
Are You Happy Now,
You've Won,
This Sick-Twisted Game Called Life,
Has Brought Me To My Knees,
And Now I'm Begging You Please,
God Take My Life,
God Take My Hand,
And Hold Me As The Lies Destroy Me,
I'm Feeling Weak Now,
Theres Blood Everywhere,
I'm Seeing Stars,
The Room Is Spinning,
The Ground Is Rushing Up To Hold Me,
And I Whisper Goodbye All,
For You Will Never Know All The Tears I've Cried,
And All The Times I've Wanted To Die,
So Baby Kiss Me One Last Time,
As I Fade Away Into The Night.
Is This What You Wanted,
To Bury Me At 14,
But Darling Can't You See,
There Was No More Warmth Inside,
My Heart Grew Cold The Day You Had Left Me,
But There Was No Stopping Me.
I Crossed My Heart,
And Hoped To Die,
Stuck A Dirty Razor In My Vein,
And Watched The Blood Pour Out,
Darling Don't You See,
Tonight Was The Night I Killed Me.
Author notes
Umm. I Dunno, Just Talk To Me.
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A contest entry
- Let It All Out by BeautifulDisaster9.
525 points, ended May 10, 2007, 21 entries
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really really good lots of emotion
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wow i really really lik this poem
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I love it! I can feel your pain as I'm sure everyone can. Your express it great, if you ever want to talk message me.
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This reminds me of a poem I wrote once. I have to say yours is better, though. I really love it. I hate that you feel that way of course, but the way you expressed it is amazing.
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i really like this..... i've been a cutter for 3 yrs. now... I've slit my wrists once....but my sister found me...and i've almost succeeded by an over dose... but still.... I love the emotion in this poem...and if u ever wanna tlk about anything..just message me.. b/c i've been there and i'm still doin it...
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this was a great write and i can relate to the feelings that you described in this poem..your words were touching and if you ever need someone to talk to im here for ya
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"The Ground Is Rushing Up To Hold Me,
And I Whisper Goodbye All,
For You Will Never Know All The Tears I've Cried,
And All The Times I've Wanted To Die,
Well done...I like it.....This captures the essence of death so metaphorically! Good luck in the contest.
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Absolutly enjoyable...
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Intense.
This is good. Dark, intense, very emotional. I liked it. The only thing I would suggest is not capitalizing every word, because it is a little distracting, at least to me. However, you may have intended that, so in that case, it's all good.
I loved these two lines:
"Darling Don't You See,
Tonight Was The Night I Killed Me."
They ended the poem perfectly.
This kind of reminded me of like, idk, a cutter's lullaby.
Anywho, Well done!
Best of luck and thanks for entering.
<3BeautifulDisaster9 -
I don't wanna loose you, i wouldn't forgive myself cause i couldn't save ya
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omg
so sad but i likedd it if u wanna talk my msn address is tomhondow@hotmail.com
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