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~ Pennsylvania Avenue ~

Missing image

~*~

Rolling

the dice, playing

their silly government

games. Await their next vetoed

promise

~*~

Vital

needs not met in

our country, Senators

try to play hop-scotch losing to

liars

~*~

Money

sent overseas,

our pockets empty and

our bellies starve at Presidents

request

~*~

Clothing

my children has

become my burden and

todays gas price I can't afford

to pay

~*~

Kicking

off my old shoes

from a hard days labor,

Pennsylvania Avenue screams,

no more

~*~

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The Old Shoe

 

 

 

 

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Pennsylvania Avenue

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  • forever dreaming
    June 17, 2007

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    Wow, this is so strong and I really like the style you have used. Not only does it read well but it looks fantastic on the page. Governments are all the same even in Northern Ireland, believe me. I loved this piece. The language was simple yet very, very powerful and the imagery profound. Well done and many thanks for entering my contest. Good luck.


  • penman gold member
    May 3, 2007
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    Excellent


  • azure85 gold member
    May 3, 2007

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    Welcome to Monopoloy!

    This is really great, a Cinquain Chain!  And what a message you gave with one vital green property, Pennsylvania Avenue! And so witty, you used the Old Shoe to tell about the misuse and unconcern of those who sit in power, on the real street. This is really a wonderful entry, and a very pertinent statement for these times. Well done!

    Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest!

     

    Susie

     


    • Arkbear gold member
      May 3, 2007
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      My Dear Friend Susie ~

      Thank you so much for your honest review ~

      I felt as if this contest may have desired more of a *comical* tone....yet when I thought of Pennsylvania Avenue, I couldn't resist ~

      I hope I have not taken away the fun that you were hoping to receive from this contest ~

      Your review is most appreciated my Friend ~

      Bear ~


  • Desire gold member
    May 3, 2007

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    Wow!

    Powerful piece penned Brother Bear and love the emotion You have brought forth!
    Ditto with the message for it speaks volumes!!
    Love the form You used!!
    Magnificent presentation
    This is certainly a unique Brilliant take
    on the game~

    Best wishes to You in the contest!!!
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Sissy Desire~*~

    • Arkbear gold member
      May 3, 2007
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      My Dear Sissy, Desire ~

      Thank you for your review my Dear ~

      I wish more of this message could be heard throughout Pennsylvania Avenue ~

      Lovely to see your presence today ~

      Brother Bear ~


  • StarEyes
    May 3, 2007

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    My dearest Uncle,

    How true your words!!!!!! If there is one person that can afford todays gas prices, I have yet to meet them! And trying to keep clothes on my son, who just keeps growing and don't want to stop, is well, hard enough, then you have to go and add food for the bellies. Good grief, where does it end?!? I have yet to figure it out!!



    But any ways you have done a great job on this one!!
    Keep that pen flowing!! Best of luck in the contest!

    Big Bear

    Loves ya

    Nyetta

    • Arkbear gold member
      May 3, 2007
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      My Dear Niece, Nyetta ~

      Thank you for such an extensive review of honesty and wisdom ~

      I am glad you could relate to this write...like who can't...right?

      Have a wonderful day my Dear and keep a upon your face always ~

      Uncle Bear ~

      • azure85 gold member
        May 3, 2007
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        Oh, I think it is wonderful. It is what came to your mind, O Poet.

        I go to Pennsylvania Avenue a couple times a year, but sit in the National Archives. I sift through things such as you wrote about, but do not even turn my head for a peek at that house 6 blocks down. The stories that unfold before me are much more interesting, and tales such as you write about, need to be told.

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