My thoughts are big
But my body is small
I try to escape
but just hit the wall
If knowing our fate
makes us divine
Then why's all i want
To escape my mind?
So terrible and black
Big and bleak it is
So tender and sweet
all-encompassing: my fears
I try to focus
I try to hold on
How will I stay together
I struggle to move on
This emptiness inside
It tears me to shreds
and each little tear
emerges from eyes dead
I cannot see the light
No matter how I try
They ask me if I'm fine
So of course - I lie...
Author notes
My ravings when I was in a particularly dark and despairing mood.
A contest entry
- depression or dark love by Darkened eyes.
370 points, ended May 24, 2007, 26 entries
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Comments
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This shows deep emotion and how it can feel to be in a dark moment, i espacially like the last 2 lines, it's something which everyone does do much
'They ask me if I'm fine
So of course - I lie... '
A great poem =-) -
i love it
it holds a ton of deep emotion. i can feel it all the way through. the poem is so sure of the concept of despndence and beats it in over and over again. it is powerful and heavy; a wonderful work. the poem really goes inside what you feel.it is provocotive and makes the reader see through your eyes which is the best feat a poet can acheive. amazing job. great poem.
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