You are always there
In my mind
Eternally gnawing the little sanity I posses
Every step
Every fall of my feet
Carry me further onto this mournful ground
Dreams betray me
Calling you back to me
Each night my prison
My shame and loss of you are all to real
Time has not faded you
Twenty years have only given you more strength
Seeing you in sleep
Each night
My friend
My shame...
My guilt
Author notes
Just had a bad dream about someone...tend to often...
Please tell me what you think
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Surprised
As I read this I was led into believing that you were writing of some past lover or even a past tormentor. The ending took me by surprise and yet it was refreshing. Guilt is perhaps the hardest thing to face, and you have done so and expreesed it in a very touching manner. Well Done!
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. It is really appreciated.
Despair
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great
that is awsome and thanks 4 the comment
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Thank you.
Despair
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Oh my gosh..
this peice is just beautiful..
I really like it..
I mean...it's amazing...the way you explain your feelings..
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lovely peice
very touching nice do pen more
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Thank you so very much.
Despair
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WOW... Great stuff.
Great stuff. I wish I had enough points to give you an applaud or 2. I really feelt like you were talking to me when you said "Seeing you in sleep... each night... My friend.. my shame... ... My guilt" Great GREAT JOb. That poem ROCKED! -
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Thanks. I really appreciate it. You are too kind.
Despair
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Nice write.
S/B too real...not to though...
*PEACE*
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Thank you so much!!!
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OMG
One of the best poems I have ever read. It spoke to my heart and came close to shedding a tear. This poem sums my life up in a nutshell as I lost someone and to me this poem makes me think of my life without him. Please keep on writing, I love to read your poems!
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Thank you so much!!! I do appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. This was a hard piece for me to write. I am glad you could see the emotion that I put in this. Thank you!!!
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This is great. I really like this write! Great job!
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Thanks. I appreciate it.
Despair
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This is AWESOME
It is a very powerful and awesome poem. "Seeing you in sleep each night. I totally loved it.
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I appreciate your comment.
Despair
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Good
It seems almost shatterd, confused in confidance if you know what I mean, very deep and isnpiring
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
Despair
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the dreams are our fears...
i love it!
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Thanks!!
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truth brings destiny..destiny is something you can avoid...if bad dreams are part of it..then so be it...I love this poem...
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment.
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One thing I will never understand, but as much as I hate (most of) you all, I always feel sorry for those who have troubled dreams.
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Thanks for the comment.
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I am not a huge fan of the human race myself, but I agree with you. Troubled dreams suck, and I dont wish them upon most.... -
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I wish them on people I don't like...well I would if I ran out of other ill things to wish befall them 
...yeah, im a
S.O.B.
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totally been there, this is a favorite poem. i like it a lot! the flow is awesome and the words are so true. i can totally relate to it! *also thanks for the greet!*
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Thanks alot. I appreciate it.
Despair
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O.O
Well hello there you.
Remember me? Your masterful mastermind of poetic genius lol
Lets see....That form, that shape....that feeling and pain the overall guilt Its painful and sad. I LOVE IT
~Cast
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Thanks Cast!!! We have missed you sooooo!!!!
Despair
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To me this powerful and it is sad kinda.
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Thanks much for the comment.
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brill
fantastic, you really grasped the emotion and internal torment one memory can wreak on a person, im going through a similar situation at the moment with a friend and its just not getting easier, some people you want soo badly to forget are the only ones who stick in your mind.
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I know. It sucks how people can haunt you for years and years. This is a friend I lost that meant so much to me. I wish I could forget, but in trying to do that it only gets stronger.
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i totally get where your coming from, i possess a REALLY estranged, weird situation friendship, and im the one who always gets hurt, so right now im hoping to detach myself even though gettin off a relationship is like comin off a hard drug, the poison is in the rehab and in forgettin the relationship.
you have a real talent for poetry
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Thanks.
Despair
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"Time has not faded you
Twenty years have only given you more strength" amazing lines! so sad how some ppl never do leave ur mind. hope i get over my latest tragedy..loving a jerk. maybe he'll feel this way about me since he's lost me forever wonderful poem as always hun!
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He better feel that way after losing someone like you. Most people in this world are crap. You are a gem and he didnt deserve you.
Despair
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wow this is really amazing stuff... you are so talented and i'm so glad you are writing again! i loved the ending too by the way...amazing
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Thanks. You know that you are the best.
Despair
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touching!
and powerful and affecting! I love it!
"Eternally gnawing the little sanity I posses"
was my favorite line
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it.
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