Prism of the mind
Through which Providence now shines
And pierces my heart.
Author notes
Thought of this recently...wrote it down now. It was inspired by another contest (you couldn't use a bunch of words about eyes, yet had to describe them).
A contest entry
- Haiku & Tanka II by sheltered.
600 points, ended May 7, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best of the Best of the Best, etc. by Heavenly Angel.
1500 points, ended June 13, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dust Off Those Old Haiku (Traditional 5-7-5) by Pollycheck.
425 points, ended December 15, 2007, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Prism of the mind
Through which Providence now shines
And pierces my heart.
Thank you for entering my ku contest. This is a very written poem, but I think that the syllable count is bad. I ran it through two different online syllable counters and they both came up with 4-7-5 vice the required 5-7-5. -
Beautifully done. This is a real treat.
thanks,
John -
Excellent write! Very spiritual. The metaphor even makes physical sense because if the eyes were prisms they would refract light down into the heart!
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I love this.."Prism of the mind"..Interesting message..from the mind to the heart..I like that..
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Sounds kind of dark on first inspection but after some thought it is actually very uplifting. Nice Job.
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