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For the money

He did it for the money
He didn't care for his honey.
I try but fail
To make him feel.
I didn't force him
For I have no limb.
We can't love each other
Because we don't have one another.
I can't see
Why he hurt me.
So I am leaving
For he was out of tune singing.

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  • Sassyfairy
    May 2, 2007

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    I love it! The last line made me smile, even though this poem isn't meant to. I just loved the last couplet. Great job, keep it up!


  • iamthebeatles
    May 2, 2007

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    I read it alraedy and i told you one it ROCKS! You have an error in the secod to last line that should be fixed. plus I think that you should have the 8th line say Because we don't .....ect.
    awsome!
    *peace*