All the knights-in-shining-armour are dead
All the prince charmings are gone
All the damsels in distress have lost their voices
All the dragons have been vanquished
What else is there left?
Who will save the voiceless damsel
from the killed dragon?
The disappearing Prince Charming?
Don’t make me laugh
Surly not the dead shining knight?
That’s a good one
Thanks to all this humour
my kingdom is gone
No one is left to take the throne
No one is here to attend court
No one can protect my kingdom
Everyone is gone
Everything has vanished
The library has gone up in smoke
The ballroom has crumbled
The bedrooms have fallen into ruin
The dining hall has been destroyed
This looks to be the end of my story
Please tell me what you think
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Good...
I liked it. It definitely had a feeling to it that I could pick up. There were a few parts that seemed awkward (stylistically) at first, but it all really pulled together after reading the final line. It was very expressive... I liked it a lot. -
Wow, that is a really depressing opening stanza. lol. You don't even play around, you're just like BAM life is hopeless! And go on from there. Personally, as for the ending of this piece, I think the finality of it all would be better represented without that final line tacked on to the end. To just say "the dining hall has been destroyed" is enough to suggest that there is really nothing left. That final line just seems filler to me. Otherwise, this makes me want to go write my will and consider dying right now. lol. But of course, that's one of the reasons I liked it. I'm a masochist at heart
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