without the yo-yo of yesterdays
pulling strings taut with tension,
we'll meet with cause to celebrate,
calibrate a new calendar,open portals
perchance when what's done & dusted
is laid to rest,resurrecting hope in heels
that walk in step
I'll meet you by the cliffs
in southend-on-sea,
for open heart surgery
& let the healing begin
we'll throw clay & cast
jars to hold jasmine,
light vanilla candles
& caress in continuum,
touching without touch
Author notes
#78 words nb southend-on-sea is a town in essex,in the south of england.
A contest entry
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Wow. That was amazing. Jasmine and vanilla are two of my favorite scents. I can imagine the smell of the candles, the feel of the sea breeze.. This is beautiful. Nice write, and good luck
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Interesting
A real thought provoking write! Makes one feel in touch from a distsnce. Touching of soul and mind. A bit of a mystery relationship. Well done my dear friend. haven't heard from you lately, Don
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I love the descriptive elements in the last stanza. I read it a couple of times and I could experience it well.
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a virtual feast of alliteration, very nicely done...
fine work and a great entry
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to perchance meet a loved one by the sea, whisper thoughts of endearment to ears opened by waves of emotion, then hand in hand, stroll shingle beach under foot, would make the day perfect. just as your words here have done. well done, and hey, best of luck.
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What a spiritual gift you have, guidance when one needs healing, all should voyage to your page and your gift. This provides me with an image of you standing on a cliff with your arms outstretched, heart open, eyes closed and whispering from one soul to the soul you speak of these exact words...Love the title, metaphorical masterpiece....
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When I need some simple way of getting through the day, I just come and read your words, your beauty flows from within with masterful strokes, I feel the words within my heart and you take me to a place no one else can.... pure perfection
Karen
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A spiritual essence abound within these lines, it carried you through a soft and touching read about healing and building. I found your words had a wonderful rhythm to them and too found them thought provoking. This was certainly an enjoyable read for me this evening and I wish you luck in the contest, I think you tapped right into the request of the host.
~Tia
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Lovely poetry, Yvette and those last two lines just stay lit in the eyes. There is an ethereal and spiritual quality about this poem, yet something so very real too. The "caress in continuum" is amazing and you've even added a touch of alliteration too. Simply beautiful.
~ Nicolette
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Thankyou for your comments Nicolette
I am heartwarmed you found those things within this,it was written in mind of a beloved relative I am distanced from geographically and emotionally at present,it is my dearest wish to heal the divide and the love that I have for him is spiritual,I shall love him in this life and the afterlife with all of my heart,thankyou for reading and sharing your insight,love and light,Yvette
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a great poem
& caress in continuum,
touching without touch
Well I do agree you touched me while not touching me ..lol..Indeed there is a point and philosophy behind the concept which you are with it here and this relate to all the people who can live with their hearts..who can hear the voice of the heart..your words are verycalming and soothing as well..as usual your pen is flowing a river of the thoughts moving towards the end of the muse..welldone my friend...
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thankyou for reading and sharing your thoughts,I am glad you found those things within this piece dear poet,thankyou again
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i remember visiting southend as a child - all kiss me quick hats and candy floss
this is lovely
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yep,that's southend-on-sea, "kiss me quick I'm chocolate-too late I've melted" lol I used to live right near the kursaal,the cliffs are spectacular,more towards westcliffe,hope you had the obligatory sea side rock too! Thanks for reading hun
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i liked this
'when what's done & dusted is laid to rest'... i see this as finally getting past bad memories/mistakes... the kind that are brought up over and over.
'touching without touch' is brilliant and a damn good title too
new beginnings... starting over fresh with a clean slate
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thankyou,you nailed it and I am glad you liked the title,for I can write a poem easier than think of a title,thankyou for reading hun
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