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My heart is not broken

My heart is not broken,
the doctor says so.

But why do these pains in my chest
continue to grow.

My hands how they shake,
my heart does pound.

A tornado in my mind,
i can't take the sound.

The doctor he gave me,
these little white pills.

He said i should take one
when my body ills.

I'd rather not do that
cause its just not me.

I dont like to cover up
what i dont want people to see.

I'm open and honest
I will not hide.

And if your brave enough,
you can comealong for the ride.

So instead of taking a pill,
I sit here and write.

I'll tell everyone
of my plight.

Author notes

ok this is a little corny but i oh well they say the best poetry comes from life experience well this is not by far a best but it took up a minute or two lol

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  • xMurderxShexWrotex
    May 2, 2007

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    This was not corny at all. Actually it was really great! and I seriously think that not too many poets like their own poetrey. brcause its there emotions or whatever they are feeling and somethings when they see them again and again written out they either relive whta they were thinking or feeling or they despise or dislike what they were going through at that particular time.
    But really it was a good poem, very creative. every line was good. i like how you talk about the tornado in your mind. and i like how you say that you show what you are feeling or going threw instead of covering it up or "camoflauge"
    congrats, it was great!