Looking down upon the world he once created
we've made a mockery out of those seven days
The once massive forest now are houses
and the rivers are now full of pollution
Looking down upon the world he once created
some people are now contorted versions of man
racism control the lives and cause distance
and poverty has tooken over the once equal
Looking down upon the world he once created
government now controls the world
and religion pulled it apart from itself
guns now have tooken over god's job
and rules restrict the nature of humans
Looking down upon the world he once created
the only ones that try to keep the master peice
are now looked upon as outcast and hippies
while others look down upon god
Author notes
Do you think god stays up in heaven for fear of what he’s created down here on earth?
No I'm not religious but I loved the idea and the whole outake on the idea!
A contest entry
- Quotes - dark and depressing by BittersweetPhantasm.
600 points, ended May 3, 2007, 12 entries
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hmmmm... i think this has an interesting perspective on society.
thank you
well done and good luck -
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Thanks for the comment... I would like you to know that this poem isnt completely finished! I was in a rush out the door and had to submit in order to save it! I will finish it tonight!
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I think that most people have gotten a little down before once they pause and took a look at the world around them and all of the bad that is sensationalized by the media. I like the title though, I've never heard the question posed in that way. It's easy to get down like that, but there's a lot of natural beauty left in the world, and good people do still exist, even though there IS a lot of bad. Nice message here, good work. One thing: I don't know if this was intentional or what but "tooken" should be "taken". It's in there a few times. Thanks for sharing this!
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