Should i be sorry that your life was hell?
Do you think mine should be too?
You think i need to be just like you.
But this time i can't say: I love you too.
Things are changing.
This life is rearranging.
Every step i take.
Makes your heart ache.
Im not making the same mistake.
You say im just like you.
What you don't see is that my words are true.
Those things you try to make me do.
I've already outgrew.
Don't hit me for being myself.
I won't hate you for being yourself.
Just remember this: "IM NOT YOU"
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A contest entry
- Let It All Out by BeautifulDisaster9.
525 points, ended May 10, 2007, 21 entries
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well this is a really good poem, i reallyreally like the emotion behind it. i feel the same way.... i just wish they would understand. if you're looking for criticla feedback then read on.. if not the just stop reading
Well as much as i like this poem... i'm a ryme addict... and this doesn't really have a ryme plan... it just kinda has some words that ryme every which way. it kinda adds a funky character to it which is cool if you like it that way.. i'm more of a
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person myself, but w/e you want. you might just consider that. also... theres one line... I've already outgrew.... that makes no sense to me... i know you're trying to make it fit into the ryming... maybe even I already outgrew would be better... anyway, just my thoughts, this is a RELALY GOOD POEM THOUGH and keep writing! i'll be sure to add you to my favorites!
kat
p.s. thanks for the commnet on mine!
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Interesting.
At first I wasn't sure if I would like this. In the end, however, it grew on me. Well done.
Best of luck and thanks for entering!
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