I am walking away.
My eyes are closed.
I am bearing a transition
it all seems so real to me
yet my emotions are not flowing.
They have been locked inside
burning dreams and reality
knit together in a basket of life.
The nightmares
The hellhouse
I have left it all behind.
If you tell me I have to go back
I swear I will choke on my breath.
Scary memories flash
like the jigsaw puzzle
being hastily broken
by a little kid in frustration.
I look behind to see
where did all start?
Was it me who was responsible
for all the chaos?
The screams haunt me.
There are scars
all over my delicate body.
They will fade
but my mental strength is gone.
I am sliding between
figures of my mother and myself
It feels so strange to me.
I remember the whips
that come over me
again and again
leaving blood stains
so repulsive to one's eye.
I remember my virginity been stolen
and my poor failing limbs
been tied to chains
which are invisible
but burn the core in such a way
that its remains are hard to find.
I am running away
letting my mother know
Its over.
I am no more your slave
your beauty queen
your lovely angel.
I am girl
and I am not letting you
destroy my life.
I will not let you sell me
to someone who will give you money
to drink or smoke
or destroy me.
Not only you break yourself
you destroy me.
Have I instilled a pride in you?
Maybe I have
but I have lost more
of what was mine.
So I am leaving
I do not know where I will go
but wherever my new home is
it will be better.
Since it is pain
that I have suffered
I know bleeding would not hurt
tears will not ignite me
pain will not break me.
Even if it should
It would mine..
and not someone else.
I prefer to bleed
the blood of a monster
that I have borne in me.
I sit under the street light
waiting like many more
for the fear and agony
to space out
between heaven and earth.
I condemn love
they hurt my spirit
injure my survival...
Author notes
Something In The Way
option no 4
Tennage depression!
Dear Reader...
This write is for all the people who was suffered abuse from their own blood!! Its a rather simple write which is not usually what I write these days but something told me to write about this and I did! I would really like your views on it.
Thank you!
A contest entry
- Why Love Sucks by cali951.
375 points, ended May 20, 2007, 17 entries
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Comments
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Amazingly Stunning
Your words scream out to me ... I feel your pain, I hear your cries, and I bare your burdens ... I too know of this shame ... and it's because of the shame ... that I am who I am today ... Bravery is what caused me to open my eyes to such missery and move on with my life ... You have really brought out a very poweful piece ... You explain your feelings well ... and you have expressed the true hurt deep down ... I am applauding this piece with three applauds, but had there been more, it would surely be yours for the taking ... this piece is so wonderfully written ... the form is great, the rythem and beat of this write, takes you to another place ... you are a talented poet ... and I hope you see light at the end of the tunnel for you ...
Much Luv & Respect
Sparkeh
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Hummmmmm different and touching. A very powerful piece you have here. Great job. Thank you for the entry. Well done.
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very touching
wow, this is so powerful. i am in awe of your talent, you really show your emotion. fantastic work, this is truly beautiful
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been tied to chains
which are invisible
but burn the core in such a way
that its remains are hard to find
the thing i remember from my rape that still gets me-i had my feet tied spread from each other and my hands bound.. while ive gotten used to the hands, at night i swear i feel the rope holding them in place and i dont know if that feeling ever goes away... i hope it does...
is this a true story? i like it-its quite sad and rare to find such a story but on the same hand it shows strength, the letting it go and leaving the fucked up place the person has found themselves chained in...
thanx for following the rules/for entering
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Hmm..
Very deep write indeed.
Filled with emotion.
I love it.
The lines :
I look behind to see
where did all start?
Was it me who was responsible
for all the chaos?
Really got to me. I can relate.
Thanks for entering and Good Luck!! -
this was a tgreat write and i really enjoyed reading this..your words were strong, powerful and emotional as well...i can relate to this so much keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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wow
This poem is very powerfull and discriptive. I like it. it hasnt a rhyme scheme which is my taste but it still flows really well. good job
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wow. very intense. I reread this a few times, its very well done. I really felt for the character. I became involved emotionally in the poem, which is only accomplished through good writting. excellent job!
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I really like this poem the way you described everything as if you were really good its sad dark but still very good but now i have a question for you why does love suck? good job and good luck in my contest
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"I condemn love
they hurt my spirit
injure my survival.."
That is why love sucks! Its a story wherin the girl has felt no love and the love she had recieved is fake and illusory and now she is so scared of love that she is afraid to venture near it! To her love is a sin and all she wants to do is live freely...love suxks for her!
Got the drill??
Thanks for the comment
preets
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...Tear
ths was an awesome write... I felt so inspired... I have been treated fairly well physicaly by my family but still i can relate to the pain plainly expressed... But the strength is also blatant. To have such strength would be amazing...
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Thanks so much angryelf for the lovely comment and the applauds!!
preets
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"Scary memories flash
like the jigsaw puzzle
being hastily broken
by a little kid in frustration."
First off, that stanza is amazing. It has a wonderful analogy. The whole poem is amazing. From what I have read so far of the entries in this contest, it is going to be very hard to judge.
This poem is so strong. Well, at least that is what it came across to me as.
Well done, best of luck and thanks for entering.
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Very well done. Raw and incredible. However, reread it all, maybe outloud. There are some lines where I'm most sure that you've left out words. Probably on accident but it makes reading it a bit bumpy. This is incredibly powerful, don't let little things take away from it all.
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sad poem
well written maybe a bit long but it definitely captures the reader on a sorrowful subject matter. Alot of emotion in this poem. good write
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this was really a really sad poem but it was written really well. keep writing wonderfully.
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You have some strong emotional lines in here, but they might be a little downplayed by a bit of wordiness. Like at the beginning, for instance. The first four lines aren't really offering any imagery that the reader can relate to, but then the last three lines bring it out. If you cut some of the beginning, those three lines could easily relate the same message without flat out SAYING what the message is. Does that make sense? Anyway, you've captured such a difficult experience, and it's always a tenuious subject to write about, especially if from a personal perspective (I'm not going to assume it is). I wish there was a more positive ending, but I understand that sometimes, what you're left with is brutal truth. The intensity was very real in this piece
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I love the beginning, well written, 'knit together in a basket'. Emotions roll over me like the ocean breakers, there's no stopping them. So powerful, great write.
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wow yo, omg that is a sad poem. keep ya head up grl.
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painful
this poem is very emotion and very painful to read. Any one that has been abuse should not have to live there lives being abuse everyday!! you did a good job on this poem!! take care!
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Such Pain
This wirite is filled with emotion that is so painful. The reality of this type of abuse makes it even more painful. The flow of this piece is very fluid, and the words are well chosen. The imagery is wonderful (if you an call that much pain wonderful). Great Job
*Go with God* my friend,
Valerie
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Oh this is so deep, so tragic a situation you write about. Certainly a kind of theraphy to release these feelings like this. Cannot understand how family can do this to their own, but it happens more than we can imagine, I am sure. Hope situation is now better that you are away.
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a good poem, ah sadly life is full of people living in dangerous situations where those that should look after them abuse their position of trust, there is always hope in the world though, the future is as yet unwritten
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