My soul is infected
Insanity deep and slow
From poison collected
In my life, long ago
A time of hell and fear
Long ago, was it fate?
Why did it reappear
This deadly contaminate.
Ruthlessly hard it hit
At this uncertain time
Forcing me to submit
To death, slow and sublime
Dark and black, what I feel.
I'm intensely deranged
A feeling so unreal
Reality estranged
Sick, I hallucinate
Satan and all of hell
Demons with fiery hate
Eternally here, I dwell
A contest entry
- BEST PREWRITE QUICKIE by Abidoodlez.
460 points, ended January 26, 50 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emo/ Death/ Abuse by Violent Glass.
550 points, ended February 13, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thanks for entering and good luck!
<3 Abi -
Wow!!!! This is highly intense!!!! opefully this isn't your everyday feelinggs, but, very well written!!!!
~DAWN~ -
i loce the feeling this poem put upon me....I loved the flow, and the rhyming pattern was perfect. Awesome job!
Jessica -
This poems deep. it shows feeling in a dark way that is amazing. i look forward to seeing more of your work. keep it up. if you'd like you can take a look at my poems anytime.
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definitely dark and depressing
good flow and made me feel the place I would not want to be in. Dark and dwelling of hell. seems to speak of a second chance in which failure prevailed or the devil . not much for the dark side but I liked this one good write
. Rewarded 4
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Yes, this was indeed dark and depressing. Who want's to end up in hell?
No one I am sure. However, I liked your word choice, the rhyming was well done and not forced like some poems. The end stayed just as strong as the beginning. The length was perfect, not too long, yet not too short.
Dark poems are not my favorite, but...
I say, good job on this poem!
. Rewarded 6
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Nice job!
Great forceful rhythm, meter, and flow. The structure, itself, was sort of unsettling in it's abrupt ends, which I can appreciate as a literary tool. Astounding imagery, even if a tad cliche. Nice job. -
this is dark and powerful in its words. i love the form you have chosen...everything just flowed together and the rhyme wasn't forced. a great write indeed. good luck to you in your contest. i am sure you will do great!
~bee
. Rewarded 4
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heya..this was a great write..i really enjoyed the words that you choose and the way that they flowed together ..this was a powerful write keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest..
~Chrissy~
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