precious petals
entwined in love
your body finds me,
in the dark
soft angelic whispers
hands to soothe you
come unto me,
lie with me
sooth your cares away,
be a part of me
your name is on my lips,
i gaze into your eyes
love is but a touch away…
whispered in time
A contest entry
- INSPIRATION AND MOTIVATION by Jeremy0826.
550 points, ended May 3, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Lovely poem. I love roses.
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I like this line "be a part of me
your name is on my lips...",
... so romantic.
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very pretty. love the blue.
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Simply beautiful
Petals, soft, soothe, whispered...love. I feel as if I've been caressed after reading this. -
"love is but a touch away,
whispered in time"
I love those lines.
how true it is..
and the way this flows was impecable.
I love it!!
Good luck in the contest sweety
I hope he likes it
Love,
~Krys~
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This is very beautiful and sweet.
I love the imagery here. Thank you
for your entry in my contest.
I appreciate it and wish you the best
of luck with it in my contest!
Jeremy0826 -
An incomparable masterpiece of love!! I like the backdrop color shaded in the same tone very powerful and sacred too. Very wise choices of words. Is to love means to commit oneself without guarantee, to give oneself completely in the hope that our love will produce love in the loved person.. I always think that love is an act of faith and whoever is of great faith is also of great love.. "soothing cares away" is so recognizable one consciously being afraid of not being love, the real, but... usually unconscious fear is that of loving what matters also is the faith in one's own love.. in its ability to produce love in others, and in its reliability
love these fantastic last lines - love is but a touch away
whispered in time
I agree Time always will tell Just unequaled. Best regards.
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this is beautiful, and i love the picture! the ending really got me "love is but a touch away...whispered in time"...
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Stunning and classy
This is very very beautiful indeed. A satin and silk-laden piece this is. Wonderful, romantic piece that carries the reader away. I love the words that you used in this, Sie. Wonderful
Wayne
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Wayne,
Thank you for your lovely comment. Glad you found the words soothing and full of hope! ~Sie
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Sooothing
Very soft and sensual.My soul was soothed as I read each line.I found peace in these love filled words.Nicely done Sie
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Emosie,
I thought you might like this one...So far on of my favorites!
Glad you enjoyed it...~Sie
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Sweet and touching.
Awww Sie, this is beautiful and withthe rose and music, really sinks deep inside with feelings.Nicely done.
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Thank you Jules,
Glad you enjoyed it...I think this is becomming on of my favorites so far! ~Sie
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Very nice!
Sensuous, needful, honest,within the blue petals of its making.
Enwrapped within a soft, sensuous flow of the delicate rose.
Love the music and the pic too!
Sounds like your ready to give in!
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Lol, Keith never...
Love has not bitten me yet...glad you ejoyed this poem! Sie
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What a truly beautiful, gentle, soft, loving and peaceful write! Kudos to you for writing such elegant, loving poetry! This is awesome and I loved it!
All the very best to you...always
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Heavenly,
I wrote a similar one to this earlier today called 'Golden Dawn', new style I'm trying seems to be working for me! Thank you for reading and commenting. ~Sie
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So beautiful, Sie, just a soft whispered pen on the page, I loved the sentiments in this
Love, C
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C...So nice of you to comment. Glad you enjoyed this one! I had fun writing it
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i liked it and usually i dont like abstract poetry, i liked how the stanzas seem to form into one entire coherent thought. This effect blended well with the overall theme of the poem. The imagery was intese especially considering the short lines and the short length of the poem. it seems as if the words were each specifically chosen to produce an effect. It is one of the best peices of abstract poetry i have read, thank you for sharing
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Lucifer,
Thank you for your omment. Its a new style I'm working one, seems to be working well for me so far! ~Sie
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love is but a touch away…
whispered in time
how very beautiful everything about this is. the picture and the words. thank you for sharing such beauty with me. viyanna rosemarie
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Thank you Lantress...Glad you enjoyed this piece..I thinkits one of my favorites lately. New style seems to be working well for me of late. ~Sie
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should "sooth" have an "e" on the end of it? I think so, but I suck at spelling, so unless it's an obvious faux pas, then I'm never too sure. You have a soft approach to this, and the romantic side of me today is really needing to read things like this. It's not what I'd consider a personal favorite approach to writing, but when I'm in the mood darnit, then it's what I want! lol. I enjoyed this one. Thanks for allowing me the chance to read and comment
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Thank you Nicole,
Yes that was a typo..now fixed...lol! Glad you enjoyed this piece I had fun writing it. ~Sie
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First off let me say that the sentiments of love spill over in this beauteous work of word-art. There is a sense of unbridled love here. You have penned an elegant work poet. Very soothing, with eloquence and flare of quill.
Much Love & Many Blessings ♥
Renee
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I like this...
a gentle call of love....for the love making..
come lie with me
take me away
and when our lips meet
our bodies will swelter
in the night...
these be the thoughts I ponder from this read....
I have a suggestion though..
last line: whispered in time.....I think the write would be better ended as; love is only a touch away...
super write Sie
Hug
Mal
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Mal,
Thank you for your kind words...a hush of love whispered in one's ear...soft as an angels lips...~Sie...glad you enjoyed this piece!
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Tho there is are whispers of desire, there is inner cry of love from within...desire is so evident.Yet in this desire,is a need to comfort the one she calls for.The cry of one soul for another.The poem is very powerful.
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Thank you Rose...for commenting. Glad you enjoyed this piece. ~Sie
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exquisite
a tender whisper into the ear of a lover; beautiful words, so sincere; and the artwork the blue simple rose
a metaphor to the longing in the words...so very well done here...PK
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Pk,
Thank you for your kind comment...glad you enjoyed this poem! I liked the picture of the rose as well. One of my favorites..~Sie
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