my friends think i'm one of those people
that are truly happy in this world
they do not know the real me
the side that has recently unfurled
i'm angry, paranoid, and depressed
but that's a side they'll never see
i'll put on a fake smile just for them
so they'll never know the real me
at school i walk around smiling
with a bit of a skip in my step
i pretend i'm happy every day
just so my friends won't fret
when i go home though, everything changes
i become agressive and mean
i yell, scream, and throw things
my words become obscene
i also can become depressed sometimes
and i feel as if nobody cares
but i put on another fake smile for my family
so they don't become scared
nobody will ever know the real me
and with me that's just grand
i'll never trust them with this side of me
for it's the side no one understands
A contest entry
- Empty and Pain-filled by Fallen Grace.
500 points, ended May 15, 2007, 20 entries
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I can understand this completely!
nobody will ever know the real me
and with me that's just grand
i'll never trust them with this side of me
for it's the side no one understands
Wow, this is a poem that I can honestly relate to, having to live as two people is tough I know.
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I can totally see a piece of me in this poem. I am like that around my friends, making sure they only see the happy-go-lucky side. I try to keep my depression for my alone time. I love how you find the right words to rhyme. Wonderful.
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I feel this way a lot. I know what it's like to hide your feelings because of being afraid of what others would say or feel about them.
"at school i walk around smiling
with a bit of a skip in my step
i pretend i'm happy every day
just so my friends won't fret"
and
"nobody will ever know the real me
and with me that's just grand
i'll never trust them with this side of me
for it's the side no one understands"
They are my favorite parts.
Great poem, a lot of things are expressed in this poem and it was written wonderfully. Good luck in my contest.
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you sound like me lol i always hide how im feeling
good write well done
keep writeing
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Yikes. What a strong poem! Very well written too Good luck in the contest.
I cant help but comment on a couple of things though, and that is how can people show you they care when they don't know what is going on (because you're hiding it), and also that you'll never find someone that understands for as long as you hide it. There are plenty of people that understand, but you have to put yourself out there to find them
Ofcourse, that comment is only relevant if this is expressive of a stage in your life. Keep up the great writing!
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my fear is that they will not feel the same about me if they knew the real me, which results in me not being able to be myself exactly
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