I can't take the pain
My heart has been torn
Into too many tiny pieces
That slip through my weary fingers
But it seems I have not the will
The patience
The time
To mend my broken heart once more
Nights spent alone
Crying my eyes dry and
Gasping for air
Have left me broken
Beyond repair
I cannot go on
Not with this pain
Caused by your lies
Caused by your hate
Please
Please don't hurt me anymore
Because I fear
That if you do
I may not make it
Author notes
Contest poem. Not aimed at anyone, I promise.
A contest entry
- Empty and Pain-filled by Fallen Grace.
500 points, ended May 15, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - anything by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended June 19, 2007, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i felt like this when i broke up with my ex bf
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ride on dude excelent
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enter this one
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it may not have been aimed at anyone but it was amazing...sadly i think many people reading this have a picture of someone in their mind...keep up the amazing writing
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WOW
this is amazing seriously i havent read such a deep poem as this amazing lol -
Deep
I think you already know my emotional relationship with this poem. I love the way you express yourself in these deep and amazingly beautiful words. I love this poem.
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Simply Beautiful
I love this poem! It shows so much emotion, and it seems like a lot of people can relate to a write like this. Keep writing! <<3
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is sad very very sad i can relate to it in many ways i loved it!!
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Very deep and emotion-filled. Pain and sadness is both expressed in this poem well, fitting perfectly with the title.
"Please
Please don't hurt me anymore
Because I fear
That if you do
I may not make it"
Great write, Good luck in my contest!
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You are quite possibly one of my favorite free-verse poets on this site! This is amazing! The only reason I'm not pointing out my favorite parts is because I don't know which to choose. The pure emotion expressed here is astounding. You really turned that title into a masterpiece. Expressing raw emotion is what poetry is all about.
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Glib.
This poem portrays what you are feeling very well, and I think you did a great job with it. My favourite stanzas were the first and the third, and though the ending was a lot less powerful than the rest of the poem, I still think you did a great job with it. Good luck in the contest! -
Good luck in the contest! This is really good. I think it parallels with the topic of the contest perfectly! You did a good job.
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this is really sad. i hope u never have to feel this way.
I can't take the pain
My heart has been torn
Into too many tiny pieces
That slip through my weary fingers
i loved thsi stanza. well. it another great write!!
=D. goodluck in the contest.
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This is really good girl! Wow... so deep and... ouch... yeah... great write! Good luck! Rock on! xoxo meg
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