Just tell me how many more times
You'll take hold of the gun
And put those bullets through my heart.
I just need an answer
Because my mind can't bear the pain
Of being played with.
Such illusions make my body weak
And the holes in my heart bleed out
With such sorrow of unwanted love.
Watch each drop
Glisten with the tears that fall with them
And dilute the wasted blood.
Until nothing's left
But a pool of confusion to reflect upon.
Please tell me what you think
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Good imagery in this one. Well written
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wow
Great work, i liked it, it was very interesting...
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hm interesting you have the ideas down for sure but learn to word things better and you could improve alot i beleive u have alot potenial in writing you just to use. the words are there u should try rearranging them more in the begining then the end. very well done.
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It's a nice poem hipposaur.. very nicely written..
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Your poetry is so pretty
Hope things get better.
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Wow i feel like this many of times. such great imagery my favorite lines are
Such illusions make my body weak
And the holes in my heart bleed out
With such sorrow of unwanted love.
Watch each drop
Glisten with the tears that fall with them
And dilute the wasted blood.
Until nothing's left
But a pool of confusion to reflect upon.
Keep up the good work.
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So painful and deep, this heart your as it always bleed, the ache, the pain and the feelin, how much it crush you, killing you so much more and more with everything inside....
I hope you're feeling better now,
Antonio
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