My eyes are blazing, and Ive burnt a hole into the very depths of what I thought was a security shield.
& here we are in plain black and white...
This uncontrived force, wasn't by pure chance, you know I'm not standing here because I happen to hear you cry out... (I felt those screams in my soul)
but somehow you want to forget that you were crying in the first place, the shame hidden under your eyes blankets me in a strange epiphany.
The succession of yearning impulses helped me conquer what ever it was we thought would come naturally... It never will.
At random selection I could hear the undertones of your heart because you knew, felt, sensed, that luck doesn't give-a-damn about you. & I told and told you that you had to become a player in your own game, though your lack of security made it hard for you to ever leave the ground.
You came for me, You came for you, baby, you came for us
Because I told you that spontaneity and loving thoughts would get you no where.
Author notes
6. "Success is not the result of spontaneous combustion. You must set yourself on fire." - Reggie Leach
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Comments
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very cool
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I could hear both of these characters, or at least I heard two characters. Interesting how you made it feel, or at least me, there were two people conversing with one another.
Unique and written well. I liked it. That's all I can say. -
Commentary`
From several perspectives, one can see the personalization of a confession being told while another contemplates what really is happening within the mind os an individual who is seeking those emotions while trying to keep a firm hold of reality in the same manner. Thank you for entering and keep penning -
My eyes are blazing, and Ive burnt a hole into the very depths of what I thought was a security shield.
& here we are in plain black and white...
This uncontrived force, wasn't by pure chance, you know I'm not standing here because I happen to hear you cry out... (I felt those screams in my soul)
but somehow you want to forget that you were crying in the first place, the shame hidden under your eyes blankets me in a strange epiphany.
The succession of yearning impulses helped me conquer what ever it was we thought would come naturally... It never will.
i love how you started this out
&& all the amazing words you used
ily =]
♥
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