In the squalid streets
of old London town,
'neath the night's dark gown
lived an evil Jew
and his thieving crew.
He would take them there
to his filthy lair;
all the homeless boys
starved of lifes real joys.
They would learn to steal.
They would learn to lie;
'neath the night's dark gown
watched by Fagin's eye.
Then into his web
came an innocent,
workhouse born and poor.
boy who asked for 'more'.
Oliver his name,
forced to play the game.
'neath the night's dark gown
down in London town.
But when hope seemed lost,
fate, his sad path crossed,
and a long lost locket,
proved his genteel birth
Oliver was saved,
Fagin lost his crown,
'neath the night's dark gown;
In old London town.
Author notes
Oliver Twist
A contest entry
- Charles Dickens by Elvenfairy.
375 points, ended May 10, 2007, 1 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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HOODWINKED !!!
You have quite elegantly captured the mood and spirit of the time piece. Your poem aptly tells the story and you develop the characters in this dark enviroment and introduce Oliver, who is eventually vindicated and restored to his proper station. Well written poem with a very interesting style.
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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Isn't odd that I would end here after writing Knotsies and you replied to that and here I am. This is a wonderful piece of work and by the way, effort. This took some thinking and some manuevering. I see you won gold with it and you should have. There is no reason to make a bunch of idiotic statements about it as you already won the gold. You are a gifted artist and I am glad I had the chance to drop by here. RC
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THis was very defferen style. An old story poem sounds like a classic poem found out some dusty place. Amazed at the imagery the creativity here... really nice it does sound like charles dickson suond like a masterpeice
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This poem is very awesome. I do agree, this is Oliver Twist's tryst with destiny in a nutshell. mmm... Keep flying dear. Let us watch you fly like an angel in the deep blue sky. Nice poem.
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I love the line! It is the focal point of the entire peice and it is perfect. Oliver Twist told entirely in a few stanza's. Great Job!!
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i was lost when i was reading this. the language was complex and confusing for me.
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Very diferent her I couldnt quite get the story
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this was great! Amazing! I loved it! Did I mention taht it was great?! Oliver twist is my second favoret Dickens book! Thanks for doing this! I had feared that anyone entering would just do their poem based on the play, but this was great!!!
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