They gave me the key
said go take a look and tell
us what you think
It's available for rent
if you like it
I asked my Mum to come with me
and we drove to the street
with the funny name and there
she stood. The spooky old house
I felt a cold run over me
as a moved onto the steps and approached
the front door
Mum started to shiver
and as I put the key in the lock
I felt led flow through my body
I couldn't Move
Mum pushed the door open
and walked inside
I still couldn't move
To my amazement
I felt a presence standing in my way
I was scared but decided to talk to it
and asked if it minded if I took a peek around
I promised I would not rent the house
as I realised I was not really welcome
Suddenly I was able to move again
As I entered the passageway
the cupboard door flew open
and 2 pictures
one of an old man and one of an old woman
fell onto the floor at my feet.
I was startled and gave a little scream but
I picked up the pictures anyway
sure now the two old people
who's faces stared up at me
from their frames were
letting me know who they were
and that this was their home
and I was NOT welcome
They were an old couple
and must have owned this house
They obviously didn't like the looks of me
and wanted me out
I felt their concerned unhappy spirits
strongly around me
They didn't want me there any longer
They wanted me to leave
I was sure they were watching me
and becoming very agitated
so I thanked them with more calm than I felt
and fled
Mum following me.
We both felt like we were being pushed out
because they were tired of us being there
So to stay longer could have been
dangerous.
We felt fine once we had
turned the key
locked the door behind us
and driven off the premises
That is a day I will remember
all my life
A 100% true account of my experience
with a haunted house.
I wonder if they are still
stuck in there
or if they have moved on at last?
I guess I will never know.
I Wonder if others got
out the way I did
or stayed and met a worse fate
at the hands of those two old
sad stuck Ghosts.
Author notes
This is a TRUE STORY
A contest entry
- FOR HUGH WYLES FAVOURITE’S GROUP ONLY # 11 by huguenauties.
800 points, ended May 12, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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AHHH Yes! I remember this one. The links are working fine now.
Lovesya little Sis.
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Wow this is awesome! I would have been curious but s-c-a-r-e-d!! I would not have had the courage to go inside. What an incredible experience. Thanks for sharing.
Jeannie
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Now that is strange, I went to that house and they invited me in and we had a grand time...I think they just don't like you. LOL
Imagine that? Going house hunting and encountering ghosts? That wouldn't be fun, not the kind you have drawn anyway, they scare me.
Right after circus clowns and politicians, ghosts are the third scariest thing I know.
Scary poem.
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Wow, that is quite a scary experience. I would not have stepped inside the house, I think, I don't like to be where I am not wanted. Well told tale!
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shivers
WOW this sent shivers, Iv met some spirits but none so determined
Great stuff
Mia
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OHH Golly gosh
and you say it's a true story? What an experience you must've had. Very very scary story. But very very good, I enjoyed reading it.
Hine.
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Clearly Jan they got the wrong impression of you,To me they sound like sad lonely people who would never get on with anyone.If i was a ghost i would love to welcome life back into a home that had given me so much love.Hope they wander trapped in time and sadness A great write and an enjoyable read.Good luck in the contest
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Spooky!
Quite a scary experience you had (but it gave you an interesting story to tell and a great poem to write). Best of Luck in the contest!
Maureen
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I am not going with you to any new houses...lol....this is downright spooky.... really rally, now I am gong to have to stay up and read a whole bunch more poems to get this outta my head....
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I, for one, do feel there's ghosts around us, spirits who for one reason or another are not ready to leave.
This is an eerie story and one to take notice of. Since we apparently don't really know the power of spirits, I think it's best to leave them in peace.
An excellent story, and I wish you the best in the contest
Dee
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WOOOOOOOOOO Spooky Jan, I can almost see the scene before my eyes of you and your Mum standing there and the pictures flying off the wall at your feet.
I'd get outta there quick smart too!
This is another beaut poem.
Jen.
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Pretty scary
OHH Jan, WOO HOO! Now that would be scary, and to think it actually happened to you. Now this is what I like. Good ghost stories that makes your hair stand on end.
Thankyou for entering the group contest and good luck.
Love Joan
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Dear Janice,
A very convincing story. If, as you say, it is (or was) true, it's no wonder it has stuck in your mind.
It must have been an eerie sensation and a very scary experience.
Thanks for sharing it here. Good luck in the contest.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh R.
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Many believe in ghosts because of experiences just like this one you explained in this poem. Easy to read and understand the sentiments you express in these lines. Liked the flow and the brevity of the lines.
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WHAT A WONDERFUL STORY!
I think most of us have had our experiences with spirits but are afraid to say so. I have had mine as well. I enjoyed this story so much.
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