don’t you know me?
I guess you don’t.
Im the one that said, "I'll shoot my life away just wait and see" and i did with a rusted bullet.
Still don’t remember me.
It doesn’t matter.
Nothing matters anymore.
You tore my heart in two.
Your emotions were like a ragged dagger.
What now?
Remembrance is so hollow
You remember
A pretty girl
A little girl
A twisted girl
A hollow girl
You remember me suffocating under the weight of society
You remember the emptiness that filled my green eyes.
Go back to taking your sunken pills.
They don’t help.
But help me. Help society.
Do me a favor and the rest of society make me bleed.
End the suffocating.
With my life in your hands take me and end the life of this girl.
This Pretty Little Twisted Hollow Girl.
Author notes
created for the contest:
title me with lies
by: keep on sewing
title used: Pretty Little Twisted Hollow Girl
words used: suffocating
empty
hollow
make me bleed
shoot my life away
jagged dagger
rusted bullet
sunken pills
it doesnt matter
nothing matters anymore
what now?
A contest entry
- Best of the Best by Sapphire Rose.
600 points, ended May 21, 2007, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Title Me With Lies by Immer Leben.
450 points, ended June 2, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really like this. I love the emotions and the descriptions that are in it.
You remember me suffocating under the weight of society
You remember the emptiness that filled my green eyes.
I love those lines. I can relate to them. Great Write I love it.
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Hm...A good poem. But...if you're going to use a certain Wordbank word, please make sure it's right. Not "Shot". Please use "Shoot" next time.
Thanks for entering.
~S~
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Instead of helping this girl end her life, I'd rather help her see the good, or what little there is left of it.
Society in general needs to learn of these kinds of problems they put on kids. The need to do well in everything, to get an education for a decent job, to treat everyone (even the most ungrateful) with respect, to get things done perfectly... It's all just getting to their heads, making them into something not children anymore. More like adults in tiny bodies. Disgusting, in my opinion. You did a fine job showing that with what little you said. Nicely done.
Sweetest of dreams! ~D -
wonderful
awesome .. I love it. I realte well to it. Very talented write.
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