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When I died

I had this relationship
I thought was going well
But somehow I couldn't realize
It was going all to hell

One day I realized
He was getting tired of me
So I did what he begged me to do
I thought now my love he'd see

All I wanted to do
Is make him stick around
I didn't know what to do
But someone else he'd found

It didn't make it better
It only made it weird
Every time I'd talk to him
Over my shoulder his eyes peered

I will never forget the day
When he said that we were through
He told me he was sorry
But I just don't love you

I will never ever forget
That feeling that I felt
It made my insides turn
It made all my hope just melt

I was lying in the floor
Wondering what to do
Crying out to something
Wanting something new

Sometimes I still think
Although it's been so long
Why did I really do that
I knew it was wrong

I just wanted to be loved
But it never worked
He only played me for a fool
While my feelings around he jerked

Today I'm still haunted
I can't trust the words of a guy
Maybe it's for the better
But I can't trust that they won't lie

I'll never be the same again
Ever since that night I cried
If there is anything I'll never forget
I'll never forget the night I "died"

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I don't know if this is what you are looking for but I'm trying to think of something that changed me. This is definitely it.
Written July 23rd, 2003

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  • SilverxXxShadow
    July 24, 2003
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    It was a nice poem. I liked your last stanza..."I'll never forget the night I 'died'." They are super cool lines. I enjoyed this poem. Thank you for entering my contest...good luck.

    ~Shadow