Despite the differences of skin color
and our cultural upbringings,
we're more than brothers of Mankind -
Technically, we're kin.
Go to the mountain
preserved by ice and snow
where the revelation of Ararat's secret
is available for everyone to know.
For the ark's existence
proves the global flood story is true
and being our brother's keeper...
Is still a right thing to do.
Descended from Noah
are the many races of Man;
see our palms have the same tint -
By a show of hands.
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Author notes
option 3; Heb 11:1
A contest entry
- Live and Learn by FindingFate.
600 points, ended May 19, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In The Same Skin by Almighty Aphrodite.
700 points, ended February 11, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The sentiment is apposite and well presented - particularly the final lines - but, as kin are brothers and brothers are kin, the first verse seems not to fit correctly. Have I misswed something? Thanks for sharing
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Regarding the first stanza...
This verse is a subtle way to point out racial hatred and tension, which primarily extends from ignorace and poor upbringing. Although mankind has differing cultural viewpoints and skin colors, we are all still sons of Adam and Noah - provided you believe the story of Noah's ark.
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This is very deserving of the gold... the ending was sublime, the middle was beautiful and the beginning was captivating... I like the tone of this poem... the rhyme was done very well and it flows beautifully
Keep writing
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I love the ending, " See our palms have the same tint- by a show of hands." very true indeed. Lovely words you have written, thanks for sharing
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Liked the low, rhythm and rhyme of these lines, and the message you share with readers here. Interesting title, and liked the way you brought the ending and title together like that. Super gold winner too in your first contest above. Way to go.
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it is a very beautiful write.
i enjoyed reading this poem.
the rhyme is perfect, and the power of your words is really big. they say such a truth "all we are equal"
i saw you win the gold and i can't agree more with that.
keep it up
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Nice! Do you mind if I read this, (contributed to you, of course) at school for a find-a-cultural-connection reading? It would be perfect!
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Hello My Friend, it's me again, hehe:
Anyway, this is yet ANOTHER true and awe-inspiring poem. Something that everyone needs to be reminded of everyday you do that in such a wonderful way. As with all of your poems, I am forced to sit back and ponder just what it is that you are saying...wow....
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wow this is awesome. truthful and very beautifully written
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wow, great job!!! I really enjoyed this piece! a great tribute to the unity of all races and cultures and nationalities! I am not a huge fan of religious lecture or scripture however I do appreciate the relevence between them and reality in every day life! Great job and best wishes! Good luck in the contest!
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Two simply facts with depth of meaning. Congratulations on the gold - Frans
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THIS IS TRUE. ANYTHING LESS IS SUPERFICIAL AND INSIGNIFICANT. FANTASTIC MESSAGE IN A SUCH A BEAUTIFUL POEM. GOD BLESS
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This is a good piece, you've done well for yourself in this write. I see you entered this into a contest, congratulations on your trophy! I hope to be reading more of your writes soon, and keep up the good work!
All the best,
~Stephi-Dawne~
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We are all as one. Your words ring true, if only we all could see it. Such a simple thing...yet so hard to grasp for some. Lovely words of truth..thanks for sharing
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This was well said and I couldn't agree with you more!!! I really liked it! excellent write, and very good job with the words... I feel connected with this poem because this is the point I have been trying to get across to alot of people! and you said it all with just a short poem! Good Job! -
Ah this is the spirtual tone of life so beautiful as well.well done...
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Lovely, I think its really cool how you took your knowledge of the bible and used it to write such beautiful poetry. It takes a talanted poet to be able to write about the bible, because its so complicated!
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This is absolutly amazing! Such strong words spoken throughout the poem. Such truth through your message. I thank you so much for writing such a thought prevoking piece, making readers wonder why they may ever doubt the equallity of human kind!!! I see this won the gold and I must say I fully agree, this is well deserved! Two thumbs up on a strong, truth speaking piece.
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I really agree with everything that you have said here. You nailed it right on and very worth of the gold that you have recieved
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This is so true!! I love this write!
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Although I remember commenting on this once before I am happy to do so again.
This is such great poem and so full of truth that it deserves the Gold that it's been awarded.
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i AGREE
i agree totally
you have great flow amazing talent and are using it to spread the news thank you for taking the time to post such a poem. We truly are the same when it boils down to it. Made by out creater God bless you -
First of all, I have to agree with most other reviews: the ending is the best part (not that there is anything wrong with that which precedes it). Secondly, I really admire your strength in using the bible for inspiration (for poetry). Many a reader will think you are pushing your religion on them. Unfortunately, it is not enough to let others have their own beliefs; the day has come when we are told not to express the beliefs of our own. My own belief in the bible is still up in the air, but I love seeing people who have faith in something and wear it for all to see. Congratulation on the gold.
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loved this poem it was lovely and had realy good feeling, the last paragraph was the best i thought and drove home the point i enjoyed reading this hope to see more!!!
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Awesome write! The last stanza really caught my attention. I think it was the best part of this poem!!!
Descended from Noah
are the many races of Man;
see our palms have the same tint -
By a show of hands
Very clever writing!!!!!
GBY
SilverButterfly
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The flow of this poem is excellent, and the contents are verytouching and inspiring.
Your words are so true and powerful in this write.
Thanks for sharing this, a beautiful creation from a poetic mind.
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i'm not a Christian but i think your poem is a wonderful piece of anti-racism. Keep up the good stuff bro. loved the whole poem
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Nice poem! anti-racist huh! i like more the first paragraph and the last two lines of the last paragraph. good job! keep writing.
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Good luck on the contest.This gives one something that needs to be learned and done in this world.People judging by color or race is wrong.We are all one and all share the same feelings and perspectives on life in many differant ways.Glad that you wrote this and hope this message gets out loud and clear and people get over the color and deal with each other as a whole and not seperated.Great work.God Bless.
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This is beautiful. What the poem made me think of was completely different from what I thought it would be about after reading just the title! I didn't have any real emotional response to this poem, but it did make me think. I love poems that make me think!
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This is awesome. You did a wonderful job with this piece. Congrats to you for winning the gold trophy and good luck to you and this wonderful poem in the other contest. I sure hope it wins.
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This was a very good read. It flowed very well, you portrayed your thoughts very well also. There is a lot of vivid imagery in this piece.
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This is a very well written piece of work. I cna see why it won gold. Congratulations and thanks for sharing your work with us all =)
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OOPS!
Forgot my show of hands.
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We are physical and spiritual beings who, according to history, are all connected by a distinct DNA. Her bones were called "Lucy". The mother of humanity. Wonder how she would feel to know that her offspring are at constant battle? There are aproximately 53 or more wars going on in the world as we speak. Lucy's evidence of mothering the world ,and religious/race wars is the physical.
The spiritual realm connects us in the same but different way, My grandmother used to say;
"all who seek God are on the same path, even those who don't it..."
I think most times we are too afraid to look. We might see ourselves in the next person someday, void of color and prejudgments, void of disdain of difference(s), with softened hearts. But even kin dishonore kin. I pray for change, harmony, peace...
Your poem evoked great thought from me. I know that according to biblical scriptures, Noah had three sons with three different skin tones. Their genes replenished the Earth after the Great Flood. Wonder why God painted them the colors they were? LOL
Loved this! I hope you can tell that by my comment. The best to you in the contest.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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very good
this is like a real "we are all brothers" verse
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The synthesis of acids decides who we are, unique spirits traveling in unique vehicles through space time. The palms of sinners and saints look alike; few eyes have the sight to see past properties visible from the outside, that also apply to the tint of our foot soles. Footprints of a creature who had a similar stature as modern man, found in Antelope Springs (Meister track) are believed to be between an estimated 250 and 500 million years old, which definitely is a long time before Noah entered this world. Thank you for creating and sharing and congratulations on the win. Take care,
U
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Descended from Noah
are the many races of Man;
see our palms have the same tint -
By a show of hands.
Very well crafted!
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This is wonderful short and sweet! -
Gold! Go, you. I hear different races possess different gifts and it takes all of us together to be what God intended us to be. Your poem is interesting.
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That was truely remarkable. Unfortunately, we inhabit a blind society opposed to unity. This poem is a breath of fresh air.
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like this poem!! very well
although we all know that we are in fact kin... many deside to ignore the fact that others are blood just as we are!!
"Despite the differences of skin color
and our cultural upbringings,
we're more than brothers of Mankind -
Technically, we're kin."
great opening this is so true!!
"Descended from Noah
are the many races of Man;
see our palms have the same tint -
By a show of hands. "
and astrong amazing ending as well!!
great write much enjoyed!!
--kat
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Right On!!
I so believe we are all brother's and sister's. We all bleed red. I just believe this because I see we are all one, so we should help each other. Everyone can help each other. It's not hard to contribute even in a little way. It still helps because we need to support each other. Not fight each other, and kill each other in the name of war over religion which is actually war over money. As far as the mechanics of the actual poem itself, it's good to go. I see why you were awared a gold one for it. Right on!! -
I like this from a purely historical perspective.
The bible to me is a fascinating record of history that goes back to The Babylonians who wrote their records on clay tablets.
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I'm not fond of bible stories, but you did do well my dear, and I find the message is true, even if I don't always agree with the facts one might present.. A different take I suppose.
Beautiful job, and good job on the Gold.
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Excellent work , congrats on the gold also similar aspects in this one to my column In The Lord's Eyes
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Descended from Noah
are the many races of Man;
see our palms have the same tint -
By a show of hands.
Humm here you are collecting the gems of the sacred empire..what a great poem and the light filled heart of yours here..well done.. The concept is made very clear through the poetic mastery here bringing a kind of the depth of this universal phenomenon that is called life through the effective immagery ..a great poem indeed...
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I had to re-visit this poem today to let myself know there are still people in this world still feel this way.
The Bible tell us we are all of one blood. How can anyone question this? It also tell how we became different colors and started speaking different languages after the tower of Babel. I don't know if I spelled Babel correctly. I'm sure you know the place I'm talking about. I love this piece and keep it close for days like these. Thank you for writing such a true poem. -
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Yeah... There are more people who feel this way. I'm one too, and there are more. Some have even lost it thinking they are the only ones and feel they must preech about it to everyone...lol like my mum.
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I have to agree with Fall.Of.Rome I like the message you have tried to convey, but I have a hard time believing that we all descended from the same person,let alone the great flood that is depicted in the bible.That being said , we are all entitled to our beliefs and opinions and I am not here to judge anyone.
Congratulations on the Gold. Take care.
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Aha. See, I like the idea: mankind being unified regardless of any cultural or ethnic differences. But quite possibly the WORST argument for that is a Bible story, and even more awful is that you chose Noah's Ark. I think if you want to get this sort of important message across, you should do it in a way that any logical person will pay attention rather than laugh.
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What a fabulous ending and so true! I REALLY like this. I am one who has no time for people's prejudices. Keep that pen handy dear poet!
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Lovely
So true ...this is lovely
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Oh I like this one. The last line is amazing. So simple yet so profound. A great message, written amazingly well. You did this subject justice, and then so much more Great job!
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THIS IS GOOD!
POET YOU GOT YOURSELF A NEW READER OF YOUR WORK. I was very impressed by this piece!
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I like the sentiment, but being a non-Christian, the ark business put me off.
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THIS PIECE IS REALLY GOOD AND I LIKE IT A LOT I THINK THAT THIS PIECE WAS WONDERFULY WRITTEN, EXPRESSES A VERY GOOD POINT OF VIEW AND I REALLY ENJOYED READING IT A LOT
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This poems ties everything together very well, as well as explains why everyone should be united. Indeed, we are all kin. Very nice poem that deserves the trophy it received. Keep writing =]
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Magnificent!!!!
This oh, so true poem is magnificent!!!!!!! The flow is wonderful!!!!!!! The message fantastic!!!!!!!!!! If only we all could go by the words you have written here, this would such a beautiful world and a pleasure to live in..... But, all we go through has been foretold we know in due time things will be better for those of us who believe!!!!!!!!!! I love this piece and will, with you permission, pass it on to some of my family!!!!! I have to tell you, this is the first time I've ever asked this question, on this site!!!!!!!!!!! BRAVO my fellow poet!
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A very interesting take on the problems of religion and racism. An inspiration piece filled with the little twists and turns I like to see. There are a few rough spots such as:
(where the revelation of Ararat's secret /
is available for everyone to know.) -> this seems a little long winded to me, it pulls me out of the rhythm of everything else. You might try getting rid of the word "available". Though it doesn't completely fix it, I think it flows a little better. Just a small idea, though.
A wonderful write nonetheless. I loved the freshness of the aspects you place here, and it definently made me think about some things.
Congratulations, and continue writing, you have something here worth a lot of time and work.
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The last stanza is indeed the one that I liked the best as well [not to say that I did not like the rest of it]. But somehow I wished that you would have included at least a little regarding all things living and breathing [animals, flora nd fauna]. I am forever amazed at how similar we are to those as well....we are indeed "kin" [a part of all, and all a part of one]
I also want to congratulate you on the well deserved Gold Trophy
reenie
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Congratulations, Joe, on your admirable write and the gold trophy!
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This is very true. The love for all people. When we go to heaven we will share our love for our savior. My family always said it not what on the outside. It what carried in the heart that shows love. You have done a wonderful write full of love. Take care my friend.
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I love this! This is so true and you've expressed it so very well! I really enjoyed the last stanza! Great write!
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Love this and tis so true. I did a generation search and was very surprised of the different nationalities in my family line. From what I see in scripture God only created on race of people and He called it the human race, we just have many nationalities and cultures. Amen for this piece.
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Amen, brother! I love the last stanza! Great job with this write. What would this world be like if we could get passed ourselves to take care of one another? I guess maybe the question should first be - what would the church be like if we could get past ourselves and take care of one another?!
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Beautiful. We are all suppose to be united in the body of Christ. Sometimes, especially here in America, we tend to take so much for granted. The denominations in churches divide and conquer christians. The bible says 'judge not, lest ye be judged'. No matter your race, your creed, your nationality, your sins, your past...we are all the same. We may have different issues, but we all have them. Thank you.
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Great job, and so very true! We all come from the same place.
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