Her eyes were bloodshot
Her muscles rigid
Her breathing faint
Her skin frigid
He held her back
For as long as he could
But nature took over
As he knew it would
She raced through trees
Everything a blur
Except the scent of blood
So potent to her
A fire and tent
A couple beside it
She didn't seem to care
Her fuse was lit
She took out the man
His scent drove her mad
The woman screamed
But he was already had
She bit his neck
First tasting with her tongue
She savoured his blood
Before the woman began to run
She only made it so far
Before she was ensnared
She drained her of blood
Then dropped her with a glare
He found her there
Blood dripping from her lips
Staring at the wreckage
Tears falling in slow drips
He wrapped his arms around her
Felt the beating of the heart
He didn't have to say anything
She just fell apart
"Why did I do this?"
She cried to the night
Before he could answer
They saw morning light
They ran to the caves
Together they wept
Then they curled up together
And slept
Author notes
Another episode to the Vampire Series...
Now that she's a vampire, how will this change things?
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Huh. I do like this episode. It's not my favorite one, but it continues the story along very well. Are you going to rhyme the rest of them, now that you've started? The flow's a bit off, but the scene was vivid. And the title's Perfect.
Now she's had some blood, how will the story change? How will she change? How will he change?
And one last question (sorry, I'm full of them today); will they be named now, or will they forever be he and she in the poems? But good job. I love that you made her unable to control her bloodlust. -
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Okay, Buggy... here are the answers. Now, keep up with me! I may ryhme the rest of them because of the relationship now. If the relationship between the two changes then it may change again. It all depends on them. I can't tell you how the story will change because now she's had her first taste of blood. Will she let her lust get the best of her and take her over? Will she be able to control them and live happily forever with her beloved? Will she have a problem finding a happy medium? What is she going to do to survive? Will he be able to control her? Will he be able to get past her animalistic cravings right now? Will he still love her? No, they will not be named. At least, not for now. I just don't feel it in this setting. I do admit that writing this one was harder, not because of the rhyming, but because of the he she problems I was having. Trying not to make it confusing. Anyway, what is your favorite episode?
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Wow.
I like how you are writing a series with poems.
This is a really cool write, I love how it tells a story! The ending is a little nice/mysterious.
Well this is a great write, keep em' coming.
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thank you ver much
If you would like, you can read the rest of the series. It's not a complete series, but there are a few others. Here are the others if you would like to check it out: A Night Without Him
Transformations
If I Really Loved Her, I Would Have Let Her Go
A Painful Change
The Viewing
First Blood
Thanks for taking an interest!
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